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Under the Moonlight

Contributed by Mild_Tempest on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 02:35:19 PM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry



If you will be mine forever,
If you will stay by my side.
I’d be happy inside till death,
I’d be happy to confide.

If I had you to love eternally,
If I had your azure eyes.
I’d be confident in everything,
There would be no more lies.

If we had long beach walks,
If we had a vast forest.
I’d take you out every night,
Out when the air is coolest.

If we had clouds to eat,
If we had oceans to drink.
I’d be happy in all ways,
I’d never have to think.

If you will be mine forever,
If you will stay by my side.
I’d be grateful until I die,
You and I just can’t divide.




Copyright © Mild_Tempest ... [ 2005-05-28 14:35:19]
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Re: Under the Moonlight (User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 03:55:18 PM AEST
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I like the poem. I think the word IF was overused. It was like you are begging. Be strong,

Would you be mine forever
Will you stay by my side

Relationships should be on a give and take basis, not fear of loss and begging.

Smiles,
Rita


Re: Under the Moonlight (User Rating: 1 )
by marshmalloska on Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 04:06:56 PM AEST
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I disagree. I think the repetition give the poem structure, and continuity.

I love

If we had clouds to eat .... oceans to drink

Good write =)


Re: Under the Moonlight (User Rating: 1 )
by DreamPoetess on Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 10:00:16 PM AEST
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This is a beautiful dreamy write. I like how you used the if's in order to place your lover in an explanation, and then the I'de's to answer your love. Great idea:>





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