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Dark Road to Nowhere
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 11:46:05 PM in AEST
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You stare out of deep pools of pain
That threaten to spill over
Your bright smile cannot hide the turmoil
Reflected in your broken eyes
The knife twists itself deeper
As the rain beats against your window
Your breath fogs up the glass
As darkness steals across the land
You see "them" on the lawn
Terrible hallucinations
You haven't eaten in days
And now "they" are laughing and pointing
Tormented by crystal meth
Scratching at the "bugs" underneath your skin
Your depression only grows worse
Your pain cannot be pushed away
By the means you employ
Sadness flows through your veins
And tears away at your insides
Spiralling farther into drug's grasp
Taking marijuana for breakfast
Crystal meth for lunch
And Death for dinner
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bobotheclown
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2005-05-27 23:46:05]
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by emystar on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 11:55:40 PM AEST
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Very sad but great writing.
Keep the faith.
A masterpeice as it jus might help wake people up.
Huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 01:17:08 AM AEST
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Joel this was a spectacular write. A very hard hitting poem that speaks so much.
Great writting as always.
Jane xx |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 05:10:23 AM AEST
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wow so sad and heart breaking write.
awsome job |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by punkprincess6689 on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 09:12:27 AM AEST
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wow that was rly good yet sad. i dunno how to say this but its like u captured the emotion if the way wrote the poem if you get what im saying. good job
~Kim |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 11:43:23 AM AEST
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A scary testiment 2 a problem disguised as a
solution, great reality write . . .
Ben
aka Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 04:23:38 PM AEST
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well written
Sadly it is all too common... |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by shelby on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 07:58:00 PM AEST
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this gave me the shivers I saw first hand what this does to ppl very sad so hard hitting it popped me right in the head.
Michelle |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by girltranscended on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 09:51:40 PM AEST
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The beginning is awesome!
"You stare out of deep pools of pain
That threaten to spill over"
and the ending as well - really well written!
:)
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by waos on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 11:51:56 PM AEST
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Good poem Joel, though very sad subject matter. Your friend is in my thoughts.
You ended this very well. I understand where you are coming from with this,
as we just had a presentation on crystal meth and other drugs at school. It's
scary the depth and effects of drugs.
~Kara~ |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by FleurdeSang on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 07:38:27 PM AEST
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My dear friend... the heart and soul within cry recklessly for a way... any way... to help your friend. The pain and seemingly endless sorrow woven beautifully in this poem tears me apart... and I am left vulnerable, only with these words of praise and, hopefully, comfort. You never fail to grab your reader with an iron fist, force them to see things that they wish not to see, yet, cannot help BUT stare at the grotesque image left bare for our eyes... and drown in boundless awe. You express yourself with exquisite detail, as if pouring your very being through your fingertips and onto the page... Absolutely beautiful, and horrifying... Dripping with brutal honesty and merciless anguish. I, too, have had friends that became a drug addict... some perished because of it... And for this, I send my deepest prayers, best wishes, love, and hope to you and your friend. Gorgeous write, as always. All my love. Forever,
Your dear friend/avid fan,
Stephy. *Huggles* Keep er real, cheri. |
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Re: Dark Road to Nowhere
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 11:06:46 PM AEST
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| such a sad truth. written so very well, joel. you made this topic your own, and thats so very hard to do when drugs is such a common topic in poems. ive seen so many, and this stands out, because it was made you own with your words that you mastered in the first line. |
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