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Questions...
Contributed by
spazz911
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Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 08:30:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Tired of waiting
With eternal hate
Staying so long
In a one-sided bait
Who will free me?
Make my time stand still
Fill my heart with bliss
My body’s love to fill
Why did this clock stop?
Why do I defy time?
I wish to move forward
But I am falling behind
How am I supposed to
Blaze my own trail
When the paths are too cluttered
And the darkness too pale
Where will I end up?
Who will I be?
Where am I going?
Will I be set free?
When will it happen?
This freedom I hear
When will I end?
Does my future die near?
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Re: Questions...
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 08:51:56 PM AEST
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I think you genre selection is perfect for this poem. All the questions of your life here, wow, so powerful. Questions so many of us have asked in our time. I think we never know the answers to any of them till we get there and go through it. This is really a great poem. I enjoyed it a lot.
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Re: Questions...
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by blue_angel on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 09:04:11 PM AEST
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oh i read this alredy... good i like it lots. gr8 job
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Re: Questions...
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 11:51:18 PM AEST
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Very good write spazz!! I must say I enjoyed this. Really good flow, great wording....I like the line; "I wish to move forward, but I am falling behind..." I can certainly relate.
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Re: Questions...
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by Jaycee on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 07:01:07 AM AEST
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Kc, this is a really good poem. Expressed well, I like this stanza:
How am I supposed to
Blaze my own trail
When the paths are too cluttered
And the darkness too pale
It really symbolizes your frustration. Some things can't be rushed in life, some things have to happen of their own accord. I say this with regard to:
Who will free me?
Make my time stand still
Fill my heart with bliss
My body’s love to fill
It is so sad. It doesn't always happen right away. I've felt like this longer than half your life. Fulfillment of this kind of need... I dunno, it takes time. I wish I could offer some brilliant insight. Part of what it has taken me a long, long time to learn is that maybe we have to set ourselves free before we can be loved by someone else.
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