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What Once Was
Contributed by
xXx_Fem_Fatale_xXx
on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 12:39:44 PM in AEST
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As I am standing before you
Waiting for your approval
Wondering if I am suited
For your compassion doomed by lust
Seeing your lips move
Without the spoken words
Forever you are screaming
While I am muted
Slowly you breaking down
The innerself of me
Me every existence
Crumbled in small pieces
No more I can take
For all this agony
What once was
Now forever crushed
Walls breaking down
Piece by piece
Unraffeling its gates
To the open fields of joy
Reveiling the route to happiness
As I find the light in this darkness
I am letting go of you
Your frustation and anger
I am thanking you for this lesson
Learned from these mistakes
Stronger I will become
Not looking back on what once was
A simple feeling mistaken for love
Copyright ©
xXx_Fem_Fatale_xXx
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2005-05-26 12:39:44]
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Re: What Once Was
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 04:29:49 PM AEST
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It happens to many. Just keep walking forward and never look back.
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Re: What Once Was
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 05:04:26 PM AEST
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| I think this is a good write, but it could've been a great write if you delved more into your emotions...Don't hold back next time...Also there were several typos, so you may want to look it over a bit closer in the future. Keep it up! Scorp. |
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Re: What Once Was
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 05:57:25 AM AEST
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You certainly have chosen the right way to look, forward to the positive not back to the negative.Nice words
Steve |
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Re: What Once Was
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 08:16:51 AM AEST
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I think this poem is truly inspirational. Sad, with agony & pain, & then moving on in your victorious ending; walking tall. Brilliant.
You have a wonderful way with words!
Hugggsss,
Tim
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