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Seeking a Dream
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 08:03:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Night slips in like a lover
As dusk caresses day
Darkness then, soon descends
Rapes remaining light away
Mentally at midnight
Wide-awake and wishing well
These maladies of memory
Will rapidly dispel
While body aches for slumber
My mind longs to review
Candlelight and shadows
Visions there of you
An arch seen through a doorway
A table resting leg
Hands that move like clockwork
As I begin to beg
Touch me while I’m dreaming
Sleep please visit soon
Take me now to her somehow
On a beam borrowed from the moon
Hold me there inside her
Keep me for all time
In honeysuckled splendor
Till my words no longer rhyme
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2005-05-24 20:03:02]
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 08:13:49 PM AEST
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Scott, this is extremely lovely. It flows like a gently stream. Great poem.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 08:15:51 PM AEST
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ooooh! This was very nice indeed Nazzy...
Love the wordplay happening here! Hope that dream finds you...!! Scorp. |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by jyssvw22 on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 08:43:53 PM AEST
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| AMAZING |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 11:42:06 PM AEST
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Simply breathetaking
Leia |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 12:40:11 AM AEST
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Marvellous poetry..a lover's prayer to sleep with a request" take me now to her somehow
On a beam borrowed from the moon...hold me...till my words nolonger rhyme" .Naz..this is extremely beautiful. :-) venkat
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 02:58:09 AM AEST
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Awesome writing as always.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 04:07:13 AM AEST
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How totally sweet are you? This was great Nazz i adore the ending it's really beautiful and i agree with Rita this flows so well.
Amazing write as always Nazz.
J xx |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 12:01:05 PM AEST
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Gosh Scott, this is gorgeous.
Absolutely stunning.
And that last stanza...sheesh... that is a very powerful and very beaufitul stanza, especially that last line.
Amazing write hun,
*hugs tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 02:33:50 PM AEST
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An enticing melody of love and moonlit splendor, a flawless dream interpreted through exquisite words and rhyme... Gorgeous images of lovers entwined, sensous candle-light, and endles night filled with enticing illusions. For a 'just because', that's pretty damn good! As always, everything is perfect, poetry at its best. Merci beaucoup for sharing your sought out dream. May La Luna carry you to her on moonlit wings. All my love. Forever,
Your dear friend/fan,
Stephy! *LOVES THIS!* |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 03:39:27 PM AEST
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| The rhyme works well. Sort of wistful, but nice. Good job. |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 05:16:35 PM AEST
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Very sensuous. Enjoyable reading, my friend! The alliteration is especially good. Alliteration is always a good thing, methinks.
Andrew |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 10:59:45 AM AEST
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Naz,
I love the verse and phrasing of this poets' poem! Well said and beautiful. To me it speaks of an active mind that won't turn off. Infact, doesn't seem to want to turn off unless it can capture some dreams and make them reality.
Well done, sir
Will |
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Jimmato on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 11:15:29 AM AEST
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Not that you don't have enough comments already, lol.
Adore two lines in particular
Touch me while I'm dreaming
and
In honeysuckled splendor.
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Re: Seeking a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 10:25:37 PM AEST
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ah, such sweet rapture....nazzy, you outdone yourself you crafty little wizard!
And on a night like this, where the moon doth glow like a candle burning in
a blackened sky, this ever sweet and somewhat tortured creation, dripping
with senual emotion and intimate remembrance, is much adored and
appreciated by one. As always, I am humbled by your sweet perfection.
It is a pleasure to experience your tremendous gift.
~Breezy
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