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Desperate Pain
Contributed by
wachumiri
on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 04:05:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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To the door where death awaits
A man walks up, then hesitates
He looks back at the rows of them
By death exiled, to life condemned
A steady hand he reaches out
Now void of every fear and doubt
He grasps the knob as cold as death
And takes his last, his dying breath
He walks inside to darkened night
And leaves outside the grieving light
The shattered glass across the floor
A man that’s shattered to the core
He’s lost in life, a broken man
Not strong enough to even stand
When love has gone it leaves disdain
A gaping wound with searing pain
With mask of joy a tearful heart
Too often played the painful part
In love to walk, not evermore
He’s been cast out from every shore
With agony that heartache brings
Silk kisses turn to painful stings
For life to him has turned to death
His spirit screams with every breath
“A curse on love, a curse on life!”
To end it all he draws a knife
He runs the blade across his arm
Two scars declare third time’s a charm
He watches with a ghastly calm
As liquid life pours in his palm
His eyes then close as biting blade
Consumes his soul, and heartaches fade
The outer pain lets his heart rest
It calms the yearning in his breast
For in it he can find the source
Of all that gives his heart remorse
The inner pain, his heart reveals
When severed by the touch of steel
The tainted blade falls to the floor
And echoes back this world once more
A blood stained cloth the bleeding stops
From tear filled heart, the crimson drops
Relief for soul in bitter pain
Inviting blade his hurt contains
But bleeding ends and sorrows stay
Returning pain another day
Inside the door where death abides
A broken man in sorrow hides
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2005-05-24 16:05:38]
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 04:06:51 PM AEST
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A purely fictional character, as far as I know, searching for a way to rid himself of a great pain. It is not I, so be not afraid.
Take care, and... enjoy?
David |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 11:37:20 AM AEST
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| Touching story, and while I cannot relate to it necessarily, I could easily place myself into the situation, and understand the sorrows the character went through. There I go contradicting myself, but you've produced yet another well done work of art here, telling a truly compelling story, with an ending you wish didn't occur, as there should always be hope, but it was the only natural way to end things. You've done well here. |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by Archie on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 01:15:56 AM AEST
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| All I can say is wow. (this is very closely related to me) Great write. (I have found solutions but they take constant work as all things do. |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by anitajames on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 11:41:53 AM AEST
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With mask of joy a tearful heart
To often played the painful part
Something about these lines touches me.
Poems like this make me want to be well, so I can help other broken people. Good Job |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:14:19 PM AEST
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What a gripping poem that leaves one on the edge of their seat. A chilling reality to some. How sad and heart breaking. A very well told story dearest David. Outstanding, brilliant and very emotional. You write with style and u always capture the true essence of ur subject. Well done.
*hugs*
Sue |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by Pyrochick on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 08:23:50 PM AEST
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| that was really sad. its almost made me cry. it was very sad and touching, but was still an awesome write. |
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Re: Desperate Pain
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 02:15:01 PM AEST
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I like your steady, unfaltering rhythm here, David. It reads so easily for such a painful topic. I don't personally care for the cutting and suicide type poems but there is a ease and matter of factness about this write that doesn't attempt to glorify or over gorify it either.
Impressive write in my opinion.
Nazzy ~ |
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