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Pieces Of Nothing
Contributed by
Willofree
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Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 02:29:05 PM in AEST
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An explosion shatters the calm
Particles of debris fly everywhere
Nothing left to salvage in its' aftermath
No putting the pieces together again
Nothing remains salvageable
As it existed, there is no longer an entity
Who ignited the fuse is irrelevant now
There is no one left to blame
There is only an I, where a we used to be
Mourn the loss if you must
Decide whether your weapons to reload
So again, destroy any threat to your supremacy
Although, God you are not
Only you can guard your heart, and avoid the lesser hand
No one is going to dominate, or make a stand
So ready your weapons again
Prepare to annihilate anyone who becomes a threat
Teach them all a lesson, one they will never forget
Copyright ©
Willofree
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2005-05-24 14:29:05]
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 05:20:21 PM AEST
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Whoa! Turning your heart to stone and exacting revenge will never make things better for you. In fact, just the opposite. Your whole life will be miserable living like this. Sometimes love just shatters. Let the pieces fall where they may, forgive and forget, and be on your merry way. Don't miss another chance to dance to the tune of love because you were out for revenge. You might miss the one really meant to be in your life.
Good work here.
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 05:46:00 PM AEST
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I love the analogy used here, Will....you wrote this so well..
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 01:57:34 AM AEST
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sounds like a rant against the Bush administration to me, but whatever way you interpete this, it is a very good piece of writing.
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 09:35:26 AM AEST
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It is as my literature teacher said - whatever poem you read, you bring your own experiences and visions to the table in its interpretation. I'll try to see exactly what is here and see over the edge of my glasses... Obviously an explosion and its aftermath - what type of explosion exactly must be the three ways. What *does* occur to me is that for the last stanza to work, the person/organzation has to see the "enemy" as being separate from self, not a reflection of the self, and not a given lesson that self needs to learn. That seems to be a given in the persona portrayed.
A powerful write in its entirety! J. |
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 03:48:40 PM AEST
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good piece. your writing is that of truth. keep up the good.
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Re: Pieces Of Nothing
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 06:03:46 PM AEST
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Well, my first thoughts were of 9/11, and then in the polar opposite direction, I thought of a bad break-up, or at the very least, an intense argument in a relationship...I've settled on the latter. Whatever you had in mind when you wrote this, one thing is clear...You had some heavy duty emotions which you displayed superbly in this write. I enjoyed the thought process here...A wonderfully emotive piece!!
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