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My painting of rain
Contributed by
In_a_while
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Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:31:49 AM in AEST
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i'm old maybe, but i'm not gravy
i can be this soup too cold
taste me later, i don't hate her
i'm the dark old basement mould
a dust bunny can be, this can of what's me
empty home long broken alone
window of basement, my light of a waste meant
empty hole's like a small smiling soul
paint is now all black, can't bring the light back
but i'll still rain paintings of pain
i clean all my brushes, after creating in rushes
the older i stay the darker the stain
popular sun side, i let you all inside
can't you read the bitterness me
fade like a rainbow, can't let the pain go
summer has run from winter's in me...
dw
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Re: My painting of rain
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 11:48:12 AM AEST
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This was excellent! Wonderful metaphors and wordplay here...I love the ending. Bravo!!
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Re: My painting of rain
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by sride686 on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 01:20:18 PM AEST
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| This was a good write and it really was a great word play like Scorp said. It really has a deeper side to it as well. It was a good write and it as always it has that DW style to it that no one else has. Take care my friend and your work is always a good read and much enjoyed. Later for now….Steve |
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