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unpaved road
Contributed by
Gothchyk
on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 08:44:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Walking along an unpaved road
I stop dead in my tracks
Not knowing which way to turn
I Look back at all the cracks in the road
Knowing that I have overcome them
Makes me tired and dazed
For I know that there is no end in sight
I turn and focus on where I am now
There are no rocks nearby
No trees or flowers to offer their comforts
I spin around in the midst of my confusion
And stop looking up ahead
I see you standing there with arms open wide
Beckoning me towards you
All I have to do is go over to you
It took a long time, this I know
But now we walk hand in hand
And step with step, this journey we will complete
And our hearts we will bind
With you there is no need to look behind
Copyright ©
Gothchyk
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2005-05-24 08:44:07] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: unpaved road
(User Rating: 1 ) by alexb on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:34:12 AM AEST (User
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i dont think you need any corrections. it sounds great the way it is. great write! |
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Re: unpaved road
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 02:40:43 PM AEST (User
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nice poem - it was easy to visualize. i'm still waiting for someone to be at the end of my road.
PMC
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Re: unpaved road
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 07:00:58 PM AEST (User
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nicely done Goth..
revise it a little..
cut a word here and there..
better your timing and you'll have an incredible write...
though I loved it just the same!
M.O.H. |
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Re: unpaved road
(User Rating: 1 ) by remote on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 02:10:20 AM AEST (User
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Nice write, I saw a hint of one of my poems (Let me take you there). |
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