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The Finish Line
Contributed by
jaycee
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Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:27:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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With 819 points
the tape is in view
the obstacles many
the successes too few
35 poems were more
than I thought I would write
That number may not be great
but for me it's alright
142 comments
took me into some lives
They were daughters and sons
and husbands and wives
The runners far ahead
have all crossed the line
if I could finish tenth
that would be fine
With new poets every day
this one won't be missed
it's not about romance
or even being kissed
It's about friends
who want you no more
who look down on you
like **** on the floor
I've run out of gas
I've got no more to say
I've fallen flat on my face
with the line far away
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jaycee
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2005-05-23 21:27:44]
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Re: The Finish Line
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:49:41 PM AEST
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I am really sorry you feel this way JC....
I will miss your poems.....you were getting better and better with each one...
Hope to see you around still....
Your friend always,
Crazy perhaps....but your friend always..
Jenni |
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Re: The Finish Line
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:53:28 PM AEST
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*runs in wailing....* Noooooooo!
You're just... in a rut. I've been there - I'm sure you'll get out of it. Stay stay stay.
Besides... I'm slowing down a bit, as are some others. So you've got plenty of time to catch up. :-)
cheers!
J. |
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Re: The Finish Line
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 10:03:54 PM AEST
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I just got here and you are leaving? Heck,, give me a chance to catch up. Was it something I said, or maybe didn't say? Awww, come on. Don't leave. Just ride it out and more witl come. You are good..
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Re: The Finish Line
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by mylady on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 10:07:03 PM AEST
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wow . This part is sad:
It's about friends
who want you no more
who look down on you
like **** on the floor.
I understand that part myself..
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Re: The Finish Line
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 10:11:29 PM AEST
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Jaycee you have a freind here if you want one .I told you I think you are awesome and would love to get to know you better .Hope you change your mind
Leia |
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Re: The Finish Line
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by Jaycee on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 12:36:48 PM AEST
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| Thank you everyone for your kind comments. Second guessing is something I do too well; I think my signature goes like "Again, I'm in danger of out-thinking myself." A paraphrase I um... borrowed... from the Alias TV series ;) Anyway, thanks again, and I just guess I'll have to stick around and make it back to that starting line. They say life is a journey, not a destination... |
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Re: The Finish Line
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by blue_angel on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 10:28:30 AM AEST
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well get back up and finish that race JC! i have fallen on my face so many times before (literally too i have during a race lol) but it didnt stop me now did it? u might be tired yea trust me i know, but dont let it stop u. even if u do finish last, you can have the pride of crossing that line. go for the gold...
jennie* |
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