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confirmation
Contributed by
travisk
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Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 10:57:30 PM in AEST
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It has all been confirmed
There is no God
No guardian angels, no other such nonsense
Only zero-sum emotion
Born empty
Dying moreso
We are given life
Only to experience suffering
Or wade through parasitic regret
Of the injustice of our kind
Happiness is ignorance
And I choose to seek the truth
No matter how many times you distract
And force a smile or kiss
From these tight clenched lips
Did you forget
Those dead and dying
Those of no voice, no chance
And all that has been confirmed?
Come seek it with me
Grasp my foreign-blood covered hands
Shed what I cannot
So that we might both
Drown to death in your tears
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travisk
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2005-05-22 22:57:30]
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Re: confirmation
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by Jimmato on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 11:18:30 PM AEST
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| Sorry dude, didn't like it, just seemed a cliche and got lost at Parasitic regret. |
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Re: confirmation
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 11:22:31 PM AEST
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I am just glad I don't ljve in your world. This poem seems very forced and with no emotion, very cold. Keep trying.
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Re: confirmation
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by Stellar on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 11:30:20 PM AEST
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I don't think it was a bad poem. I think it was supposed to be cold. It seems to me that you've been through something dramatic that has destroyed your past beliefs. Hopefully you are able to find them again someday.
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