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Sleep With Me
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 08:47:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Sleep With Me
What is it you want from me
My dearest love?
I cannot fulfill your every dream
When even reality isn't enough.
I've tried before,
And I failed every time.
I cannot go on like this anymore
When I cannot find
You through the tainted truth.
You're so far away
When I need you with me.
You fade until I cannot take
The burning need
To have you within my reach.
You used to be my everything,
And now I don't know you.
I don't know what I used to see
When I never saw the truth,
But now I see that even waking
Doesn't end a dream.
It prolongs nightmares of sleeping
Without you by me.
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by shelby on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 09:13:34 PM AEST
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so sad and full of confusion nicely written though. Life is a confsuing mess sometimes specially when it comes to love I hope you work it out dearheart
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 09:37:38 PM AEST
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This is really beautifully dark and sad...Amazing, each line held so much pain...such talent Jen....As Always
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 09:51:32 PM AEST
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so deep and very sad..
great write
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 10:13:04 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this write Jen. Sums up in a way what I'm going through at the moment.
Scorp. |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 02:45:48 AM AEST
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Wow!!! your naughty LOL J/K.
All joking aside i really loved this poem. I've know how it is to need someone so far away that you can just cry about it.
Well written as always Jen
Jane XXX |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by pixie on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 01:16:35 PM AEST
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emotional, moving and beautiful, a great combination for a great write, as you have proved to us :)
pix xx |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 01:44:57 PM AEST
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A very revealing poem beautiful in it's
intamacy . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 10:45:21 PM AEST
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Seems to be about a lost love, yet still in your dreams. Looking for the truth. Sometimes our dream life is more real, or fulfilling then reality. The last stanza says it all, as it is painful
Splendid write
Will |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 02:58:21 AM AEST
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yes the hunger the need the pain I feel it all in this flow.....bittersweet and deep.
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 01:40:03 PM AEST
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Hmmm, I wouldn't say this is sad, more like just plain old missing someone, an intense longing.
A diffrent emotive piece from you and yet done with the same intensity that I have come to expect from you.
What a wonderful surprise and thank you for not disappointinhg me!!!!! |
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Re: Sleep With Me
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 08:26:15 AM AEST
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This was beautiful!! I love this piece, you are such an amazing writer! This was dark with sparks of hope and love. I loved the structure especially the second and third stanzas where the last lines were seperate from the stanza. They have such impact, I love it.
Please keep writing!
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