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She Could Be Tall
Contributed by
fielding88
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Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 07:14:09 PM in AEST
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She came to me one dreary day,
She lit up my world,
Why? I could not say.
“Could she be tall,
Much taller than me?”
I looked her over carefully…
Her eyes sparkled under the April moon,
I was surprised I did not swoon
At the sight of her;
Such a dear friend.
“Could she be tall?”
She asked again…
“Any girl I choose would be a pearl,
But she could be tall,
Like my current girl.
She’s great to me,
As you can see.
Even though she yells at me…
Or never listens to a word I say…
Or ignores my interests everyday…
She’s great to me,” I said
“As you can see…”
“She’s much too tall!
Much taller than you!”
How can a couple not get a clue?
When she’s too tall you look so weird!
Its like trying to imagine you with a beard!
She can’t be taller, why can’t you see?
She should look much more like me…”
“Like you? Like you? I don’t get it…
My girlfriend and I are perfectly fit.
We’re perfect for each other,
Like peas in a pod.
What part of that do you find odd?
Just because she’s possessive,
Because she’s rude,
Because she’s late
And always crude,
Because with my friends she would never sit,
Like I said, I just don’t get it.”
“But she’s tall!
Please listen to me!
There are plenty more fish that swim in the sea.
Ones who are perfect to their very cores,
One whose hand fits into yours.
Remember this thought and follow this line,
The heart you take could even be mine…”
And so she left me,
with teary eyes,
Too evidently promising nightlong cries.
Her point was ridiculous,
And I answered truthfully.
My truth, however,
Made me look like a bully.
Her point was simple,
Mine harder in reply,
And harder to take,
For those eyes did cry.
It was stuck in my head,
What she tried to say,
And I never
For one moment
Tried to see it her way.
Just then I got a call,
That my girlfriend was at the mall.
A study date ruined,
No warning at all,
And I thought to myself,
“She could be too tall….”
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fielding88
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by Fears on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 08:31:16 PM AEST
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 10:26:29 PM AEST
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Wow this one is really good! I don't think it was bad at all...Very heartfelt and cutting. I really enjoyed this write Mark...! I'm sorry to hear you'll be taking a hiatus...Hope you return soon with more nice poems! You're my only T.O friend in here...! hehehe ; )
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by girltranscended on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 06:02:28 PM AEST
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You have many great lines here but my favorites are:
“Could she be tall,
Much taller than me?”
I looked her over carefully…
Ones who are perfect to their very cores,
One whose hand fits into yours.
Very, very well done!
:)
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by freckle on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 09:16:42 PM AEST
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I loved this and I am so sad to see that you will be gone for a while. I was happy to see you online tonight and clicked only to find a semi-goodbye! Take care of yourself and hurry back soon! We'll miss you and we are not quite right when one of our own is away...and there are too many away right now! (We should only allow a few at a time...yeah schedule it like holidays at work..) Hurry back!
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 07:04:33 PM AEST
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I dinnae ken why I didn't comment on this before.
Very well written. I like the scorn that is evident in some of it, a scorn for the sort of foolishness I've seen all too often. Highly important theme, methinks. Well done.
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 07:30:35 AM AEST
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Oh Marc, this is so cute! lol I have to let out atleast a little laugh.. the beginning with the whole tall thing that was adorable, but down in the ending you find out that its not really the tallness, there is so much more.. this was very cute and not a bad write at all. It's not "rip your head off read over and over again phenominal" like all your other posts lol but this was very cute and a great write nonetheless.
Keep it up, im going to miss reading your poetry for awhile.. I don't know if I can go on... :(
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 10:42:30 PM AEST
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| too many question marks... she could be tall, she could be not at all. things arent as we see them, they never are. great poem, marc, nice story to relate to. |
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Re: She Could Be Tall
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by wheels on
Monday, 4th August 2008 @ 04:58:49 PM AEST
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I am impressed with the this one. It flows so well and rolls with a rhyhtm its own.
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