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My Distorted Heart...
Contributed by
mina-1
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Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 08:45:16 PM in AEST
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I attempt to elude myself
From this ailing sadness
The man I once loved
Has driven me to madness
I gave him the one precious thing
That I possessed and owned
My heart that I gave to him
Now lays distorted and disowned
Memories of my vile past
Torment my aching head
He screwed me up bad
I wished that I was dead
He took my once loving heart
Lulled sinful tunes to the core
Mishandled lust and betrayal
He worked my body like a whore
My life is utterly wasted
For I can no longer exist
I fell in and out of love
Now pain in my heart lays amidst
I try to deal with the pain everyday
As my distorted heart lays battered
In the gutters of an alley way
To him I never really mattered
One day I will find someone
Who will love this distorted heart
They'll help me piece together
Each fragile sharded part...
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 08:55:16 PM AEST
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This is so stunningly beautiful, yet so heart breaking sad....This is amazing piece of art.
I am sorry, I hope the best for you, and the man that you wish for comes soon...As Always
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:06:35 PM AEST
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Possibly the last sentence should read "each fragile shattered shard". JMHO This poem/story of your hurt and betrayal is one many of us have lived through. It is not easy but you cannot let this destroy you. Love will come again. Never give up on love. It is always worth the dance. It may end, but there is always another dance to dance.
Warm hugs,
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:12:57 PM AEST
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"Memories of my vile past
Torment my aching head
He screwed me up bad
I wished that I was dead"
DONT YOU DARE deprive us all of you
because of..."him"
doesnt deserve the likes of ya...
nor any other happiness!
((shiverin'))
B |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by greeneyes on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:18:45 PM AEST
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Pick up your pieces and move on. You deserve better than this, never look back. The right person for you is out there, give it time.
Nancy |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:24:57 PM AEST
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| sue, this is a masterpiece, but i would have rather you never had a reason to write this, than have this masterpiece. for a heart is worth more than a poem. this poem is a masterpiece in every sense of the word because of your emotion, power, and your use of words with style. all the best, sue. |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by TheVoice on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:35:07 PM AEST
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Sue,
This is a beautifully sad write. I have seen your heart. There is still love contained within, and it is loved. I pray for your pain to heal quickly and to enjoy life the way it is to be enjoyed.
Hugs,
The Voice
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by shelby on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 10:10:53 PM AEST
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this is so incredibly sad haunting I know this well Im so sorry for your pain. I agree with Rita though as bad as it hurts there is a heart and fire burning in you love will find you a true love
((SUE))
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 01:38:37 AM AEST
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fantastic poem//
love is around the corner
just you wait and see
it'll come and bite you on the ass
will stay for eternity
for your heart is like a magnet
love wont be able to resist
it'll sneak up to you unawares
you'll know that youve been kissed
so don't you worry Mina
throw away your pain
for love is like a carousel
it always comes round again....
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by venkat on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 01:43:02 AM AEST
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Really sad..Excellent expression of your past..
This is one of your best poems. perhaps a masterpiece...:-) venkat |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 01:44:30 AM AEST
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(((((Sue)))))))))
This poem is just heartfelt ,griping, and filled with beautiful honest emotion!! Sue you are such a kind , beautiful and giving lady , you deserve the best . I soo could relate to this and am here for you
Leia |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 08:20:39 AM AEST
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Your heart is pure and longin 2 be loved and
so shall it be till then look 2 the night time universe 4 your angel awaits thee, devine
writting from one with a devine soul . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by somedaylove on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 09:34:54 AM AEST
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| sad but wonderful write..........keep up the faith true love is out there for you the passion you write with is so strong........keep it up |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 10:28:17 AM AEST
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I hear you loud and clear. So sorry this pain and heartache is in your heart. He was not for you reading through your words. You deserve so much better and it will come your way sooner than you think. Life is a learning process and some times things dont work out the way we would like them to. You give your love and it was not returned. Love is a special feeling to be shared. I am sure you will find the one that will cherish and adore you be patient and take each day as it comes. Fill your life with happiness. Tears that are cried now will turn to smiles in the future.
A magnificent heartfelt write
((((HUGS))) and love sent your way
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by sride686 on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 02:10:55 PM AEST
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| What to say Sue your writes get better with everyone. I don’t want to sound like I’m always saying the same thing but they are really good. This one just flowed so well and had so much pain and loss and sorrow in it. You are a outstanding person and have touched my life with your writes and your friendship. You’ll find your love just as I will find mine. The second stanza really rips your heart out and draws you in to the pain. The whole thing was written well and never missed a beat from what your emotions were saying. Bye for now my good friend and take care….Steve |
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 02:49:01 AM AEST
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Dear Suel, why would you pick up where he left off.....drop him dead......in your past!!!
How can even a memory of him last!
Never look back, dear.....keep your face headed east! Forget that ungrateful Beast!
I loved your poem Sue dear, but you mustn't let bad people keep you under control.....good riddance, bad rubbage!
Love you
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Re: My Distorted Heart...
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 08:19:33 PM AEST
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| What a tragic but wonderful write...The ending was the icing on the cake! It sounds like you'll be alot better off without this 'man', and I use the term loosely....!! I'm sure your heart will mend over time, and will find itself in someone's loving care....Scorp. |
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