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As close as I can
Contributed by
Doriens_Picture
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Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 10:49:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I want to hold you as close as I can
With out hurting you and with out
Losing sight of your beautiful face
I want to hold you tight
Just enough to feel your body change
Loosen up while you rest on my chest
And tighten when you get scarred
So that I know when to let go
And then look at you look into your eyes
And see that you want me to take you into my arms again
I want to kiss you for as long as
We can without taking a break for air
I know while kissing you I would not have to
You are all I need to survive and to live
I want to feel that I am yours
I want to feel your legs rub against mine
As you slowly move to be on top of me
And I would try to count all the feathers that
Fall from your wings onto the bed
How would you feel if I sat up and
Put my arms around you and we kissed again
Then I picked you up and turned you over so that I would be on top
How would you feel when you are below me but never beneath me?
What would you do if I kissed you again on your lips?
Then on your neck and then...
I do think about us like this I can't help it
You are everything to me
Everything beautiful in my world comes from you
But I want you to know that I would never hurt you
And will always love and respect you not matter what happens
I would never take you to do something you dont want to
Or force you into a position where you would do something you
We would both regret because I love you more than I ever knew how to
It is so new to me and at times it terrifies me
But I get around it because in my heart I know that
You would never let me hurt you
You would stop me in my tracks like all girls should
I don’t know how far to take things
How far you want to take things
I know it is hard for you
I do understand
No one has ever been so close to me
No one has ever known me as well as you do
You know everything about me
And you find a way to find out more
To bring more out of me
It means so much to me
What we have
Everything that we have between us
Has been hard for you
To trust me and let me in
And I am grateful
Far too grateful to ever break your heart or trust
I never want you to lose faith in me
I never want us to part
Even when we are apart
I love you my AngeL
My best friend my everything
I love you always and just hope you will
Always love me
You mean so much to me more than anything
What I have with you now
Even though we are miles away
Is more than I could ever want or ask for?
Especially with you
You are so beautiful to me
More than perfect to me in every way
You gave me back my faith and something to hope for
All I could ever hope for I have
And it is you
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2005-05-18 22:49:58]
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Re: As close as I can
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:04:11 PM AEST
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mmmmmmm lovely breath taking moving I can go on and on nicely done leaves a warm feeling reading it creates a perfect picture in minds eye
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Re: As close as I can
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by Gothchyk on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:07:02 PM AEST
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| I still love it, and i will never tire of reading such words. They are from the heart and hold so much love and devotion, not to mention the pictures painted are ones that i would love to share. amazing write. muaw |
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Re: As close as I can
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by crap_snapper on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 03:38:01 AM AEST
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Even though i didn't like this poem very much i can appreciate that it’s honest and a couple of lines are quite good,
want to hold you tight
Just enough to feel your body change
Loosen up while you rest on my chest
And tighten when you get scarred
This is good because i can relate to this sort of observation as it's so true. I think maybe the poem is a little simple in what it's saying and how it says it. I think it's difficult to write about being in love as it's so personal that allot of people may not care and so the writing must be spot on. For me this poem it too soppy and too pointless but if everyone liked the same poems it would make for a very boring world. Keep writing.
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Re: As close as I can
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by Sahara on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 05:48:18 AM AEST
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Personally I loved it, it plucked at my heart strings I guess you could say, mainly because I once had someone who made me feel as though you write. I love that it's heart felt...
Whomever you've written it for, is very lucky to have someone to feel that sort of emotion, someone that expresses such devotion.
Keep writing....
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Re: As close as I can
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by sweetangeluk on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 07:15:15 AM AEST
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Words straight from the heart. And what beautiful words you share. Deeply touching and so loving. You expressed a well of emotion in this write.
I loved it
Excellent. Personally I love the romantic soppy ones.
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Re: As close as I can
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 10:13:41 PM AEST
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oh just beautiful!!!!!! its breath taking, this girl is very lucky 2 have you for you love her soo much...just amazing
ur poetry means so much 2 me john
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