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Mapping the Stars
Contributed by
Crimson_Valley
on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 09:47:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
happypoetry
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You gave me more than I can imagine,
From invisible things to realism.
When I知 with you my life is heaven,
You can haunt me and be my phantom.
You make my life worth living today,
Making my life bearable for tomorrow.
You and me, together we値l runaway,
We値l play and joke on a golden meadow.
We can experience the blue ocean,
Fly until we touch the ceiling of the sky.
Feel the clouds as if they were cotton,
Laugh until our lungs burst and we値l cry.
Get to wander off the Earth into space,
Feel the cold icy temperature of Pluto.
Around the galaxy we値l have a long race,
Fly around in circles of that blissful halo.
We値l make it back to Earth in happiness,
Feeling the wind breeze past us in unison.
Taking one last glance at beautiful Venus,
It痴 glory and magnificence unspoken.
Copyright ﾂｩ
Crimson_Valley
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2005-05-18 21:47:29]
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Re: Mapping the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 06:23:58 AM AEST
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Well i do not know enough about poetry to offer criticism *constructive* , however i think this is well written and great imagery
Leia : ) |
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Re: Mapping the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 01:52:44 AM AEST
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| fantastic poem I loved it .. |
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Re: Mapping the Stars
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by lovestruck on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 06:17:01 PM AEST
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as always I really liked this one! I really love how you've made it seem like it could really happen, as I was reading this I could almost see it taking place! great job!!
Taylor |
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Re: Mapping the Stars
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th April 2014 @ 05:25:46 PM AEST
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beautifully written, great images,
hugs n' love nessa |
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