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Last Glimpse of Heaven
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:23:56 PM in AEST
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Last Glimpse of Heaven
The music plays mournfully
For the lost piano player.
The notes aren't played the same
As they echo rustically
With the amateurish slayer
Of begotten refrains.
The notes lose time
As the amateur plays
The wrong lines
Till coherence fades.
Not even he knows
The song anymore
As the wrong notes flow
Unfittingly more.
The poor piano keys and strings
Having to suffer his incessant drumming.
He has no talent even reading the lines,
And it's amazing that he brings
Tears to your eyes with his playing
Of the ballads not played with time,
But played by the mournful Beethoven
Unable to see his melodic heaven.
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by ForeverAlone on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:30:00 PM AEST
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Alot differetn then normal, but still very well written, I really like the 3 stanza, (the best), and the whole thing is very powerful, As Always Jen,
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by emokid on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:41:21 PM AEST
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very powerful I hope my music last that long btw beethoven was deaf
Ian the emokid
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 10:40:53 PM AEST
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1st stanza's my vav..
"The music plays mournfully
For the lost piano player.
The notes aren't played the same
As they echo rustically
With the amateurish slayer
Of begotten refrains"
I liked the rest too
awesome read ..
very well written
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 10:41:46 PM AEST
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I really like this poem, it's really poetic :) It's hard to replicate what an artist like Beethoven can do, so it's hard to appreciate a comparison when a lesser talent comes forth on the floor...
Your poem makes beautiful music, Jennifer
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 07:33:52 AM AEST
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How moving is this write. It reminds me of a song and i can't remember the bloody title. Hmmmm...
Nice write Jennifer.
Jane xxx |
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 01:44:12 PM AEST
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I have the strong feeling that there is something powerful behind this piece that eludes me.
Mayhaps intentionally??
Otherwise a sadly powerful piece...thanks Jenn! |
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 11:55:14 PM AEST
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hmm interesting write I enjoyed the sadness
woven within the lines.
Bobo (Joel)
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Re: Last Glimpse of Heaven
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 02:49:17 AM AEST
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A very stirring rendition of regret perhaps, mixed in with some nostalgia and heartache. The imagery was strong. I could picture this pathetic man at the piano, caught up in his own sorrow. Not even conscious of his actions. This write is different than your norm, but was a pleasure to read.
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