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Dead To The World Around
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:05:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Grieving memories sedate my mind
Regrets and failures consume me alive
A labyrinth of thoughts assemble the pieces
As the ink is bled from the skin that ceases
A ghost ship sailing without a destination
Like tides that leave me all alone in isolation
Currupted lungs do not allow me to breathe
Suffocating what is already dead, within me
The shadow reflects
The absence of my being
For the sun does not light the ground
And my life has only left me
. . .
Dead to the world around
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-05-18 20:05:51]
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:38:17 PM AEST
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| ah, brilliance came from the pen the night you wrote this. this better get double digit comments. the best aspect of this would be the substance most definantly. from the first line to the last, it was an enjoyment to read. |
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by emokid on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:38:38 PM AEST
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nice write and good rhyming keep it up
Ian the emokid |
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by mina-1 on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 08:51:07 PM AEST
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Clark, talent at its best. Your skilled ability in writing comes out shining with this poem my friend. Written with sheer perfection. I honestly loved it. 5 big stars from me.
*hugs*
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 07:22:53 AM AEST
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Hmm how odd how come such a great poem lacks a comment?
Anyways i thought this was perfect. I've got nothing more to add than just by saying this poem is perfection.
Hugs,
Jane xxx |
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 01:31:45 AM AEST
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this is an AMAZING poem!!! u are really brilliant and i mean it
i love the first stanza
"Grieving memories sedate my mind
Regrets and failures consume me alive" that is written well and i can relate very much to those sad words
this is painful poem that many can relate too
wow!!!!
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Re: Dead To The World Around
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 03:38:17 PM AEST
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A very sombre piece here Clark...I love that second stanza. Well conveyed emotions. The flow stumbled a bit here and there, but overall the poem was good.
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