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Let it Seep
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 06:50:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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In the mirror
An illusion of freedom
A falsity of faith
An apparition of autonomy
In the water
A reflection of aberration
An expression of divergence
A delusion of happiness
I cast a stone
Breaks through glass and tears
Leaves ripples in the water
Which captivate beyond years
Slip a foot into the red liquid
So thick and so deep
Drip it over my skin
Into my body let it seep
In the mirror
A crack from my stone
A splinter of hope
A vision of freedom…
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Re: Let it Seep
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by Fears on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 07:59:35 PM AEST
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that is really different but also probobly one of the most deep and meening full poems on this site. I love it...the best masterpiece that I have read so far
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Re: Let it Seep
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by Jaycee on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 02:24:38 AM AEST
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| You know sometimes you write poems that make me think hard about what you are trying to say. Well, I'll admit I'm not as smart as you, so the wood's burning and I still haven't figured it out. It is clearly a visual poem and it talks about the... I dunno, I don't get it. That life is illusion and you try and take a chance but it doesn't work out right? Or does it? Maybe both. You'll have to let me know! |
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Re: Let it Seep
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by sride686 on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 01:49:45 PM AEST
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| A very visual poem indeed but it was really well written. It is a lot different then a lot of your work but different is good it keeps my hopes up in your work. I look forward to the future of your writes to see what’s next. Its hard to say what this write is saying but to me it is showing you looking at your reflection and seeing all your pain. Then letting all that pain soak into your soul again. But then with the rock and the crack you are finding away out of pain and getting hope again. If I’m right about this then it was a very strong and powerful write. But if not then I say sorry I tried my best. Let me know if I’m on point. Take care….Steve |
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