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The cold bang of silence
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:20:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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save me, i'm staying free
keep me from playing this game....
a long silver well i fall into hell
keep me from placing the blame...
spin me, i've barrels in me
keep me from pointing myself...
my grip just won't let it slip
i keep disappointing myself...
violence, the cold bang of silence
keep me from taking my time...
nowhere's there i stop and just stare
keep me from faking this life...
always, this place that i can't face
keep me from facing the gun...
i'm aching, to be free from breaking
carry me into the sun....
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2005-05-18 11:20:41]
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Re: The cold bang of silence
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:56:19 AM AEST
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| A haunting write, well-worded...The title is chilling. Nice metaphor....Scorp. |
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Re: The cold bang of silence
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by suicidal_imbecile on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:57:43 AM AEST
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nice peom, flows awsome and the words and what you say... wow good write
kate |
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Re: The cold bang of silence
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by sride686 on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 01:30:45 PM AEST
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Your writes get better and stronger the more you write dw. You have a great use of words in all your writes and they flow so smooth. Sad poem but it was much enjoyed and as always I’m glad I took the time to read it. But I really liked this stanza, just the way it flowed and it was powerful as well
violence, the cold bang of silence
keep me from taking my time...
nowhere's there i stop and just stare
keep me from faking this life...
Keep up the good writes and take care….Steve |
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