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Act of Depression
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 08:15:18 PM in AEST
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Scars of tomorrow
Bring the curse of today
A forgotten life tied together in sorrow
But in truth, broken in every way
An act of depression
Ascends above my grave
This is my suicide note, in a poem, my obsession
In my life of only being betrayed
Leaving it all to some one else
As I slowly decay
Too many cuts were dealt
In my routine to remain the same
Now I say good bye
Two words I hate, for they create change
But My life was meant to die
For it only took time to become what I've became
. . .
Everything thats nothing
Within this smothered Flame
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-05-17 20:15:18]
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Re: Act of Depression
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by sp3llicup on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 08:51:30 PM AEST
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wow..this poem is just outstanding..i love it..it really does remind me so much of myself...really..i swear..its so weird..but i love this write...i hope you write more like this one, so i can keep writing..just dont do anything rash ok?
keep ur chin up, its brighter up there
-Michele |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by Zeldianus on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 09:26:25 PM AEST
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| beautifully dark; absolutely wonderful; I love it! :) |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 09:27:20 PM AEST
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| now this is what i would call brilliant in almost every aspect. you still did the grammar messup, lol. what is this? you go like 2 months without messing up like this and then it just happens twice in a week? come on clark, get with the brilliant living poets society =] also in a line you said my life was meant to die, i think it should have been and i was meant to die, or something instead, because that just seems to make it less awkward. besides those two things i loved this from your first line till the last. ::steals it for my collection:: =]] |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 09:28:24 PM AEST
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Outstanding... Depression is a blade that scars the soul and you have expressed your agony very well here.
excellent write my friend
Larry |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 01:48:24 AM AEST
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A wonderfully written expression of pain. I
loved the title and the poem itself did not let
me down at all. I loved the first line as it drew
me right into the poem.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by mina-1 on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 03:39:29 AM AEST
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Clark this is a truly outstanding poem. Your talent and skill in writing just shines through this poem. You have the ability to convey your thoughts very well. A real touchy subject for I only know too well the pain and suffering of depression on an individual. Well done darls. 5 stars from me.....
love,
~sue~ |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 07:04:39 AM AEST
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This is... a multitude of things, really.
It's brilliant, thought-provoking, dark and mysterious-like, yet so sorrowful at the same time, and I agree, you've expressed yourself so well here Clark.
I dearly hope this is just for poetry's sake, and you don't really mean goodbye, or something that's passed, at least.
You have so many people that care about you awfully much (i'm somewhere on the top of that list :p) and want you to just hang around forever.
If you ever need to talk hun, you know where I be. (um... at school, granted, but i can fake a sickie and get on at the same time you do :D)
Portrayed your message very clearly here...
Loved it.
~Kt
(still your fan, trying to keep up though, argh :p) |
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Re: Act of Depression
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 01:34:40 AM AEST
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this is heavy stuff...woah
but absolutely powerful poetry that cuts to the heart
i loved every word clark...ur a promising poet! |
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