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Unlikly Fire
Contributed by
eleventoedsloth
on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 06:31:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Unlikly fire,
Singe my lace.
Unlikly fire burned my grace.
Unlikly fire,
take me now.
Unlikly fire,
you drage me down.
Unlikly fire,
with a semisweet taste.
Unlikly fire's just a waste.
Unlikly fire,
crown me gold.
Unlikly fire,
together, we'll grow old.
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2005-05-17 18:31:52]
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Re: Unlikly Fire
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by Sir_Odd87 on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 06:53:58 PM AEST
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| Okay... I LIKE this poem, I really do... but... I have a little few couple of problems with it... Two little spelling things... UnlikEly, and there's no 'e' in drage... I don't know if you meant to do that... if you did, I don't understand why... Pardon if this came out as really negative... I really did like it... |
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Re: Unlikly Fire
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by waos on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 09:23:22 PM AEST
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Yeah I agree with Sir Odd, like with the "unlikely"...perhaps you
did this for a reason, but I don't see it, but that's cool. Nice work on this,
it was interesting and refreshing to read. Keep it up!
~Kara |
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Re: Unlikly Fire
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by ElevenToedSloth on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 05:07:19 PM AEST
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| The lack of e in "unlikely" was intentional... but thank you. |
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