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Tears
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 07:33:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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trails of pain left on my face
with these dark tears smearing down
i try to wipe them away
but they are stained all around
a salty tear burns into my skin
a scar left in its place
i try to wash away the pain
i scratch away at my face
this tear cuts so deep
blood drips from my finger
this dreaded thing that we call life
within i no longer must linger
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2005-05-16 19:33:31]
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Re: Tears
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kyarn on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 08:01:15 PM AEST
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| Dark perhaps, but certainly powerful. Your imagery is fantastic. Wonderful job. |
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Re: Tears
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by Jaycee on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 09:17:10 PM AEST
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| 5 stars for this for 2 reasons: 1) that you can write not 1 but 2 poems when you are under the weather and 2) because this is such vivid poem. I hate you feeling this way and hope it is only the flu talking. Still, gfreat imagery with the tear. Get well soon! |
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Re: Tears
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by sride686 on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 08:27:54 AM AEST
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Another out standing write of pain and self struggle and like Kyarn said your imagery is fantastic. I’m sorry to read of your pain and the dark side of you but I do love your writes and the style in witch you write. Your dark works are always my favorite so keep them coming but I do hope that things are looking better and I’ll look forward to days when all you write is joy. Your friend….Steve
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