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bent and broken
Contributed by
nick_is_no_poet
on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 06:58:24 PM in AEST
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Silently choking
as he stands there, soaking
in the blood
of an innocent.
after finishing the war,
slaying every man,
leaving everydoor,
Unlocked
life after death
death before life
what really happens
when you're under the knife
and when you're just waiting
as the surgeon is baiting
the rest of your life
on that sharp, long knife
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nick_is_no_poet
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2005-05-16 18:58:24]
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Re: bent and broken
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by bethers_is_my_baby on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 07:08:01 PM AEST
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hmmm im not sure exactly what to make of it. i dont not like it :) but i dont know, i guess its just not my style. but u seem like a good writer, ill have to read some of your other works.
*~peace and love~* |
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Re: bent and broken
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by freckle on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 07:58:47 PM AEST
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Hey welcome to the site!
I liked your poem. Dark, but we have plenty of dark poems on here...I especially like the lines:
life after death
death before life
good work....
Carol |
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Re: bent and broken
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by Kyarn on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 08:08:31 PM AEST
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| I like that alot! The rhyme style is very lyrical. It flows well. Nice job. |
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Re: bent and broken
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by Fears on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 08:12:53 PM AEST
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wow, that is really scary and i love itt! I think that yuo are a verry good poet who has a lotta stonge visual points in your work!! awsssomme!!
~Fears~
Dark kicks ass |
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