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Dawn of Deception
Contributed by
Slice
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Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 12:40:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The lack of emotion, respect and devotion,
and hollow stare emerging from his eyes
There not in spirit, noone would admit it,
They knew they were wrong, to feed him the lies
His function; rejection, His life; imperfection
Yet never before had his view been so clear
His hopes had been shattered, he'd thought he had mattered
Now he had no idea why he was here
Alone on this planet, he won't make amends
Devoid of compassion, betrayed by his friends
Stuck in the middle, not dead or alive,
And noone's around to see if he'll survive
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Re: Dawn of Deception
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 12:36:40 PM AEST
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I couldn't believe this had no comments when I saw it..
This is awesome. A stunning, and heartfelt write. I can relate to this.
You have spoken of the feeling well, and I love how you described it.
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Dawn of Deception
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:43:24 PM AEST
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I think anyone mired in these feelings could wholeheartedly embrace this poem. It is very powerfully emotive. I enjoyed this read.
Rita |
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Re: Dawn of Deception
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by Archie on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 05:13:22 PM AEST
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| I think you will survive for you are not alone. Your poem was written very well I will check out more. |
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Re: Dawn of Deception
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by lil_angel on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 01:30:52 PM AEST
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| wow this is a great poem! Wonderfully done! You have a way with words that makes me truly jelous. |
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Re: Dawn of Deception
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by TheSpiritx on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 09:30:01 PM AEST
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Great content matched by great rhythm and simple structure. Straightforward, open, eye-to-eye and powerfully clear.
An exceptional poem and an honor to read.
TS |
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