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Ember
Contributed by
fielding88
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Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 04:31:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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You’ve fuelled this fire long enough.
All good things must come to an end.
You’re not like an enemy, but
I don’t consider you a friend.
You opened me up to a world
I never knew not long ago.
It isn’t like I hate you, but
You simply can’t be all I know.
Strain has burdened this empty heart,
And you had to set it ablaze
Didn’t you? Give me those matches!
…Promise me you’ll change your ways…?
See? This is why I have to change,
Why I can’t care at all for you.
Fire must never be played with,
But it’s just all we seem to do.
So I’ll take the ember you love
And I’ll hide it in a safe place—
A room filled with our memories,
Where they will burn without a trace.
Copyright ©
fielding88
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2005-05-15 16:31:47]
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Re: Ember
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 04:34:09 PM AEST
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I like this Marc, very good write, Captivating too...lol...Good job
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Re: Ember
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by breny on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 04:38:26 PM AEST
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wow Marc! just...wow! I agree...very captivating...it draws you in. The last line hit me the most and had the most impact in this poem. Well crafted and put together. 5 stars from me : )
Great write
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Re: Ember
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by garyforawhile on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 08:40:22 PM AEST
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| Nice piece here, sounds like someone needs a change! |
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Re: Ember
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 09:06:55 PM AEST
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truely beautiful... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Ember
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 06:45:10 PM AEST
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Bravo! This is highly honest and straightforward, with a powerful, poetic kind of voice. Excellent work.
Hoping you'll see such things repaired, renewed. Keep it up.
Andrew |
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Re: Ember
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 08:56:19 PM AEST
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| =] ah, muy caliente! fire is so pwetty. =] i loved it, loved it, and eh kind of didn't care for the charcaol taste =] but is there a bad thing in this? ::looks it over again....:: yes, the bad thing is that there is nothing for me to criticize! lol. keep up the excellent work, marc. im in a kind of excited mood for some reason. ::goes off to brush the charcoal taste out of mouth:: ....::then goes to play with fire:: bye, bye house. lol |
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Re: Ember
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 07:19:50 AM AEST
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How very captivating it is! I love this piece! ..yeah, yeah the ending - everything just phenominal! like always..
but this piece, the fire and the matches its just amazing.. this is really.. im speechless.. the matches and "conversation" if you will, in the third stanza add such a personal touch but its put in perfectly with the poem and you're able to switch back with such wonderful flow.
This was absolutely beautiful Marc.. and I just don't know how to put it in words.. this was just.. ... ........
--amanda-- |
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Re: Ember
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by Lashing_Tongue on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:25:16 PM AEST
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Hey, great title...it really describes the poem well, enjoyed this.
Best Wishes,
Jackie |
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Re: Ember
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th May 2008 @ 09:15:55 AM AEST
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| This was very enjoyable to read. Thank you! |
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