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Helpless
Contributed by
Man_On_High
on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 12:07:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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She spoke to me
through miles of open line
far out of town
past country roads
and city corner streets
(and still livin' on Broadway
in the post birth of May...)
everything.. nice.
I put the glass to my lips
throw my head back
and tell myself to stay out of it.
No way could it be worse...
quaint inquiries
result in responses all the same
so I know and feel the pain.
It comes into me...
this sentience
and there I am.. trembling
breath coming and going
'till a rushed uneventful response
leaves us each keyless-
the send box abandoned
by all but a blinking cursor
nobody says anything.
I insist now but nevermore -
juggling words
and exploited satire
are all I get in return.
Finally she weeps and says so
asking now if maybe
I've all the happiness
I'd come to find
in wanting to know
such things...
her drunken quip leaves me
stinging in the wake
of such a notion-
'till later on when I secretly thank her
and we've finally moved on
to live and reign in a happier moment.
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Man_On_High
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2005-05-15 00:07:50]
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Re: Helpless
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 12:16:42 AM AEST
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I despise that period in a broken relationship. You penned it so well that it made me tremble to remember. Hurt and pain wanting to rush out like a waterfall but neither one will make the first sob. Sad.
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Re: Helpless
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 08:44:27 AM AEST
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A sad and very emotional write. I know the feeling all too well my friend. An outstanding well put together poem expressed so well. I commend u for being able to write about such deep feelings.
*hugs*
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Re: Helpless
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 02:04:05 AM AEST
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Wow...what a story...The format and style you used are on point. They set the trail for a smooth, steady flow. Your feelings are portrayed most awesomely in this write...Hope things are better now...
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Re: Helpless
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 06:35:03 PM AEST
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helpless ..
such a sad and forlorn word it is, yet it is exactly what I feel now ~
helpless to offer any kind of solace through calculated,
but compassionate words or thoughts ..
somehow you, through words and the like, swim
through my heart and stir emotion until I fear I can
barley take another concious breath --
this is poetry, my love. And you are a most remarkable poet.
timeless and endless love to you ~
~Breezy
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