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Babylon
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 05:04:27 PM in AEST
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In the shadows I sit silent
Looking up about me
At bleak and weathered stone
Walls rise to ruined spires
Empty windows wild stare
Wind whistling through them
Beneath my feet is stone
Stained and polished of old
Worn and cracked today
Verses return to me
Out of memory a voice I hear
…weep in the time of the proud
Before me is the grandeur
Of the great, now gone
Deserted and in darkness
They took every gift of light
Until all was eclipsed
By their shadows of splendor
I sit in a dead city
Listening to lamenting sounds
Of a cold wind blowing
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Re: Babylon
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by mina-1 on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 05:27:26 PM AEST
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Andrew as always u never cease to amaze me with ur remarkable work. Outstanding, sad and captivating all wrapped in one. You capture the essence of the subject u write about so well. Well done dear friend on another magical piece of poetry.
*hugs*
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Re: Babylon
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 08:12:46 PM AEST
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Soulful winds echoing days past. Telling of life and loss and pain. Times past of love and laughter and beauty. Splendor now gone and decaying. Vanished except for the spirits in the winds. Brilliant, Andrews.
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Re: Babylon
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 07:27:40 AM AEST
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This has a sad feel to it.
I have missed your writing, Andrew.
I can imagine that this was beautiful once, and you have made it beautiful again.
Great images, and great write,
*huggies* Phil xxx |
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 12:23:32 PM AEST
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| Such imagery! blended with sadly sweet setiment....and this...this is just scribbling??!!!!! |
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Re: Babylon
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 03:55:13 PM AEST
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Well thank you for your wise words on my
poem and I must interject that this is some
mighty good "scribbling" as you called it. I
enjoyed the extensive use of alliteration that
you used in this write and the imagery was
just amazing. I loved the sense of mourning
and loss that you conveyed in the last stanza.
I enjoyed this thanks for sharing it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Babylon
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by Anu on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 04:54:01 PM AEST
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| hi..a really gud way of expressing the sad theme...very calm n beautiful poem |
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Re: Babylon
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by heartless_soul on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 05:22:50 PM AEST
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Truly a great talant you have. by far the most well writen poem I have read, your choice of words and imagery was unparalleld, truly magnificent. I can feel the beauty and, in my mind, I know of where you speek and you have showed its beauty to us by showing us its lamentable state. Bravo on a great work of feeling, truly worthy of print.
*H_S* |
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 04:34:57 PM AEST
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| Perfect! Fits my mood exactly right now. Most especially this line: "They took every gift of light." Yup. That about says it. I hope to write as well as this. Sometimes I do, but not often. Thanks. J. |
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Re: Babylon
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by freckle on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 05:14:24 PM AEST
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A wonderful write! Perfect in so many ways! Thanks for sharing it. My favorite lines were:
Empty windows wild stare
Wind whistling through them
Good job!
Carol |
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Re: Babylon
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by reflections on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 09:45:12 PM AEST
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A reminder that the sound of death is all that remains after viewing death in it’s stark, cold sadness. A picture of words . . . an artist of talent.
John
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Re: Babylon
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 08:53:20 AM AEST
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Wow!! This just makes you stare at the words and go "It's Incredible".
Im not kidding this was just excellent and i know everyone will agree with me that your just a great poet andrew.
Jane xoxo |
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Re: Babylon
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:12:22 AM AEST
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Wonderful poem, and very true Andrew, for the real City of Babylon has never been rebuilt. It had been prophecied in the Bible that it would never again come back alive, and that has proven to be true. It's a foreshadow of Babylon the Great Today, all the False religions through out the world....and that has all come true.......they are all dead!
I felt goosebumps as I read this Andrew. You hit it right on the head!
Great thought provoking poem.
Warm Love
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Re: Babylon
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:39:04 PM AEST
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Yup. Good. Thought so though, so no surprise.
I've been working on something, but it's not finished, though. Go figure.
And Andrew... |
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Re: Babylon
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by Archie on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 02:52:39 AM AEST
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| This is good. I wrote a poem called "In the darkness where I hide" That has a similar meaning to this poem. I did not post on the net and will not because your poem is better. |
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 07:03:03 PM AEST
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you are connected to the earth,
its beautiful the things you make me see
Conal |
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 03:30:11 AM AEST
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mm, good write andrew, and very thought provoking.. ahh.. the works of man... i recall a story of two men, one of whom built their house on the sand, the other on the rock. then the storm came, the winds blew, and the rain came down, and house on the sand was washed away... but the house on the rock stood firm. truth is, and always will be, but the wisdom of man (which is foolishness in Gods eyes) will fall away. it must, that built on lies cannot last. i thank our Father for our Rock of Redemption, Jesus Christ. but the sorrow of love lost burns my heart every time i think of those caught in the system of babylon. thankfully, the Lords arm is not to short to save, nor his ear too dull to hear... his kingdom will grow, and stand.
shalom,
joshua |
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Re: Babylon
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 10:00:25 AM AEST
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Sorry Andrew I came last across this magnificent poem. Yes, infinitely sad, your splendid imagery brijgs the tragic before the mind's eyes.
But I say thrice AMEN to the words of Whiterobes (Joshua) the Lor'ds hand can resurrect and put flesh on the dried bones.
as you re surrect the tragic of Babylon before our eyes with your verse.
Blessings
Elizabeth |
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 11:53:55 PM AEST
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Icy cold ruins of Babylon. You painted a great picture. Heavy and rough, harsh and cold.. art here..the wind just slices on by, tears from heavens angels
Great read,
Your friend,
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Re: Babylon
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 05:40:04 AM AEST
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Visiting this place again to view an enchanting piece of work
PFR
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