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I FEEL LOVE.......
Contributed by
dthwlkr
on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 01:23:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I`M LOOKING FOR YOU BABY
I`M SEARCHING THROUGH THE SKIES,
I FEEL SO LOST WITHOUT YOU
I NEED YUOUR LOVE TONIGHT
AND WHEN I SAW YOU STANDING, IN THE MOONLIGHT BRIGHT AND CLEAR,
THE SILVER RAYS OF THE MOON ARE STREAMING THROUGH YOUR HAIR,,,
ALL THE DAZZLING BRIGHTEST STARS ARE SHINING IN YOUR EYES,
I`M FALLING IN LOVE WITH YOU AND I WANT TO MAKE YOU MINE...
I FEEL LOVE
I FEEL LIFE
I`VE BEEN BORN AGAIN IN YOUR ARMS I JUST DIED
I`M LOOKING FOR U BABY...
I`M WAITING FOR THAT SEASON WHEN YOU`RE COMING HOME
TO BRING AN END TO THE COLD NIGHTS WHEN I`M FEELING ALL ALONE
SO WONT YOU TELL ME BABY
WHERE CAN I FIND YOU AGAIN
CAUZ EVERYDAY THAT I LIVE WITHOUT YOU
IS FULL OF SADNESS AND PAIN.
I`M LOOKING...
I`M LONGING FOR YOUR TOUCH AGAIN
I`M LUSTING WITH DESIRE
I CANT HOLD ON ANY MORE
I WANT TO FEEL YOU NEXT TO MINE
I`M LOOKING FOR U BABY...
Copyright ©
dthwlkr
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2005-05-11 13:23:31]
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Re: I FEEL LOVE.......
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by Kyarn on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 01:27:13 PM AEST
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| Hm...This is your first, ne? Welcome to the site. The poem is good. Interesting...putting it all in caps...but it's pretty good overall. Nice job. |
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Re: I FEEL LOVE.......
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by ForeverAlone on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 05:20:02 PM AEST
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OKay....first off, lets start with the caps...WHY?..it's an eyes sore, and is'nt interesting at all, just annoying.
Second, your structure was pretty good, but could be better by making the lines shorter so the rhythmn and rhyme is'nt choppy...
Also spell out words completely, "U" is lazy...finish them, seriously..
Now..for this being your first...I will be nice and say looking past all the gliches, its a pretty good poem...I would give it a 3 1/2...
Remember you asked for constructive comments so please don't get mad at me...
Good luck and welcome to YPDC...
~Clark |
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Re: I FEEL LOVE.......
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 05:07:48 AM AEST
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| Lovely description. its good work.. Saurabh. you may avoid those all caps..venkat |
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