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Forever And Always
Contributed by
EROTICADARLIN
on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 07:32:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Forever and always you will always be,
The one and only true love for me.
There has never been a guy like you in my life.
I’m blessed and honored you want me as your wife.
You’re the only one who ever really truly cared.
You’re the only one who has always been there.
We are growin’ old together in every way,
My love for you grows more and more with each passin’ day!
You’re my pride and joy,
With you the rest of my life I will enjoy!
You’re the one I always hold,
I want you more then silver or gold.
I get weak in my heart whenever you are around.
When I hear your voice it’s a wonderful sound.
You’re my angel sent from Heaven above,
You came down and showered me with all your love.
Forever and always you will be,
My true love for all eternity.
Copyright ©
EROTICADARLIN
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2005-05-11 07:32:15] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Forever And Always
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th August 2010 @ 09:08:22 AM AEST (User
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Really good poem. I can feel the emotion you have for this man, and to be honest, it makes me a little jealous. :D
A few suggestions: Line 7 and line 8 you cut of the g on two words, which really isnt necessary, and in "Then silver and gold", it should be "Than silver and gold."
Also, not as important, but a style choice i would make is in the first and the penultimate lines, make them
"Forever and always you always will be"
Just to be congruent, and it reads a little better. Overall though, i liked it a lot:) |
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