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Portrait of Self Blame
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 08:27:50 PM in AEST
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Sentiments sourly burned to ashes
As the portrait is set to flames
Memories are nothing but left behind
As is this life that I blame
Null of the substance of death
Void of that substance in life
In peace I will never rest
But living is only an endless strife
I collect the ashes and do away
From nothing to naught
Still I've returned to the fact
That my falling life cannot be caught
Change has been no friend to me
For it has always been pure pain
Is there anything left for me to see?
For I have become everything
. . .
Yet always stayed the same
Nothing
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ForeverAlone
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2005-05-10 20:27:50]
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Re: Portrait of Self Blame
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by spazz911 on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 08:31:20 PM AEST
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Change has never been good to me, i have learned to dread it with my whole being...but you can't fight it
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Re: Portrait of Self Blame
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by Zeldianus on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 10:04:07 PM AEST
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| very well written. strange that this is how the majority of celebrities feel on the inside. |
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Re: Portrait of Self Blame
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 10:08:59 PM AEST
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| ::wants to change it to cowrite with essentially9:: very well put clark and marc. i cant really say i like the ending though, but ::shrugs:: it just didnt strick me as powerful enough for the entire piece to make it a good ending. the mirror is a wonderful portrait of self blame... |
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Re: Portrait of Self Blame
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 02:49:37 AM AEST
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How on earth did I miss this?? What a great collaboration you two!! Well done, it flowed very, very well for a combined write. I do like the ending. I think it suits the poem in its entirety...Nicely done!!
Scorp. |
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