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If I could take away your pain...
Contributed by
mina-1
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Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 05:01:35 PM in AEST
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I wish I could take away your pain
So that you can live a pain free life
I'd take it all away
To rid you of all of ur strife
I'd touch your heart a thousand times
To show you how much I cared
I always pray to God above
I wished from pain you'd be spared
If I could paint you a rainbow
Colours so vibrant and hue
I'd cast it all the way to you
Just in hope it takes away your blues
If I had to search the desert
To find a cure for you
I"d travel day and night
I'd face the harsh sun too
If I had to swim the wildest seas
Even tackle a great White shark
Just to prove my undying love
Is forever true and stark
I know I can't take away the pain
Or free you from life's blues
All I've got to offer
Is a heart that loves you so true...
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 05:07:46 PM AEST
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WoW... Amazing post, this conveys my feelings for my special someone perfectly...Awesomely written and Good Luck
~Clark |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 06:46:11 PM AEST
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| lovely message sue. this isnt one of your better poems, but that is because you have some wonderful masterpieces that are hard to top for anyone. in this piece i felt that one thing that took away its greatness was the forced rhyming in some places and how it seemed so choppy in flow of thoughts. |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 09:57:32 PM AEST
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A poem of love at it's best i felt this cause it was u in every word wonderful peice of poetry
in the true scence of the word . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by loveisendless on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 12:01:50 AM AEST
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Now that's almost as pretty & sweet as you are! What a heart you have,& i'd hate to see it ever so sad!! That's what makes you so special,& such a great person!!! You just know how to melt someone's heart away,don't you?!!!
Lots Of Love,
DAN!!!!! |
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by jmpy84 on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 12:33:38 AM AEST
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| awsome write sue great job |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 02:27:15 AM AEST
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(((Sue)))))
This left me speechless!! How kind, beautiful, and incredibly expressed!!
Leia |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by sride686 on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 05:40:08 AM AEST
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| Great write Sue and always it was written with so much thought and love. Your writes are so good and they touch perfection. You are a awesome person and your heart is made known through these writes. Take care my friend and thank you for sharing you heart and love with all of us. Someone is lucky to have you to take away their pain. Your friend….Steve |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 07:24:44 PM AEST
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My dearest Sue... this brought tears to my eyes, when I thought I could weep no more... Rest assured, they were joyful tears, for having such a gorgeous and caring friend who has poured her heart out into words and comfort, I can't imagine who wouldn't want to call you toujours amie... Beautiful, heart-warming, restores hope, and shines light into a dark world. Thank you... so much for this uplifting poetic masterpiece. You have such a divine gift. Flawless write. Merci beaucoup cheri, for the dazzling comment you gave on my latest. *Hugs and love for Sue!* You're the best, sweetheart. All my love. Forever,
Your dear friend/fan,
Stephy!! *who is very proud and happy to have a friend like you!* |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by TheVoice on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 09:53:44 PM AEST
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Absolutely beautiful. Your caring shines through as bright as the colors of that rainbow.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
The Voice
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by Archie on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 06:34:52 AM AEST
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| Your poem is bueatiful, but I must say there is no need to jump hurdles for me. Just knowing you are a good friend is enough. Great inspiring poem. |
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Re: If I could take away your pain...
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 09:54:07 AM AEST
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| beautiful poem ,love poems from the heart and thats exactly what this is..loved it |
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