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Running
Contributed by
spazz911
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Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:31:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Running down streets
so paved with gold
no shadows linger
there untold
No trees
no darkness
that is where she runs
she can't stand to run at night
so she runs in open meadows
river valleys and the such
places deemed so safe by man
but forever left untouched
for men travel in thick forests
surrounded by the dark
just torches lit by devils;
dark, notorious
danger it surrounds them
darkness is its name
that's why she runs away from there
away from her dying flame
she can't go back to pathing
blazing her own trail
afraid of where it might just lead
and so she's running scared
fear is hard to follow
it harder even to catch
so that's why no ones bothered
they stay on the trails they mesh
Running Running Running....
fear makes her blood run cold
Running Running Running....
her story left untold
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2005-05-09 20:31:07]
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Re: Running
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by shelby on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:50:22 PM AEST
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incredible write took me along with you on this run
Michelle |
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Re: Running
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:53:01 PM AEST
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i'll try to keep up with you on this run... u run so wicked fast lol. yet i will always TRY to be there running by your side.
jennie* |
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Re: Running
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by Jaycee on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 10:44:05 PM AEST
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| I have read this 6 times and I have no clue what you're saying. Michelle and Jennie obviously get it, so I'm clearly missing something. Wouldn't be the first time, I guess, lol. The movement of the poem is good and conveys the fear and the images are strong... just that I can't seem to connect the dots. Still, worth 5 stars, just to make me stop and think :) |
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