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Electric Sky
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:27:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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ELECTRIC SKY
I traveled waywardly at dusk
running from life and time
'long that old dusty road
and heard a whisper on the wind
Not just the breath-
as the wind shall breathe,
but a voice
then a song...
then a singing mournful scream
A melody of flats and minors
filled with such sorrow and emotion...
Shrill cries of sadness
my elicit frightful tears flow
as darkness quickened-
Then came the rain
burning cold relentless pinpricks
a rhythmic pulse thunders
feral tremors beneath me
and throughout... It drowns out all else
until all I can hear is
silence.....then the sound-
finally rising...
the deafening roar of madness
as currents of hysteria crackle
and electrify the sky...
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Re: Electric Sky
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 11:13:05 PM AEST
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I really like the title of this poem it caught my eye, intense write, good job.
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Re: Electric Sky
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 09:35:37 PM AEST
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Wow. . . glad to be perusing your pages again . This was powerful
Billy. SO profoundly powerful. (knocked my socks right off! ) The title
drew me in and subsequently the words shot right through me.
(dare I say, like a lightening bolt?) This was creative imagery, dear
word master.
"the deafening roar of madness
as currents of hysteria crackle
and electrify the sky..."
I am astounded and amazed and in love with that !! How do you do it?
How do you find the exact words to express that moment; that
emotion; that disturbance that we are when we feel ?
As always . . . inspired beyond comprehension.
yours~
~Breezy
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Re: Electric Sky
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 07:45:38 PM AEST
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~*Billy*~
OMG, this is like, wow, the imagery u cast into ur readers head is absolutely sensational. I could just picture sitting there looking up at the sky as it lights up and the thunder crackles away. Let u in on a little secret, I'm scared of thunder ever since I was little. You did a magnificient job painting an electrifying picture in my head.
Well done King of all poetic verse. Shine on.
love from ur devoted fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Electric Sky
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 06:26:59 PM AEST
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| A verbally descriptive piece of art... a song of nature's beauty ...a flash of brilliant pleasure from the heavens above....that should do it...lol truly well done |
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Re: Electric Sky
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 09:26:01 PM AEST
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I really like the way this flowed
well done
good write. |
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