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Where have you gone?
Contributed by
Jaycee
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Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 07:54:25 PM in AEST
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Where have you gone?
I wonder right now
Hoping to reach you
but I don't know how
The silence is defeaning
from you I've not heard
I wait here so patiently
but yet not a word
Reflecting on your life
I so know is quite bad
Conflicting emotions
equally mad and quite sad
But while this matters
in the grand scheme of things
Concerned just for now
hoping the damned thing rings
Moisture stains my eyes
my heart sings its lament
she just has to come back
if only to vent
Waiting here like this
so traumatic indeed
Moving on is no option
Come back I do plead
It's like watching paint dry
my options so few
the only thing that matters
I really miss you
Copyright ©
Jaycee
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2005-05-08 19:54:25]
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 07:58:52 PM AEST
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really sweet and touching. i like the simili with the dry paint and i like this lines :
"Moisture stains my eyes
my heart sings its lament"
it portrays your emotions well, good job! |
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by spazz911 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:22:08 PM AEST
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| if this is about ur angel then don't worry she is fine and you don't have anything to fear, she will come through it all right |
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:28:59 PM AEST
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very powerful write. and just let her know you are there for her. don't try to make her talk. my friends tried that with me, which pushed me away. then they all cooled off and just let me know they were there. i trust them all better now. hope it works out!
~sprints |
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:40:48 PM AEST
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Beautifully written!! I love the emotion and intensity of this poem.
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 01:10:18 AM AEST
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| I really like this poem. Very emotional great write. I can also relate to it. I think it is cool when you can read someone else's words, feelings, & emotions and it can be related to so closely; as if to say they are speaking your words for you because of a similar situation they have apparently been in. |
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 10:40:01 AM AEST
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very very sweet, but dont overwork yourself. worrying is very exhausting, this i know becuz i worry too much. great write, i luv it.
jennie* |
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Re: Where have you gone?
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 09:35:11 AM AEST
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Very emotional.... Hope all works out...
Jenni |
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