|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Drown Me Inside
Contributed by
sicknivesevered
on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 10:39:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
|
Say goodbye...
Again
To another part of your life
A little piece of happiness that turned sour
Sweating against the buds
For just a little too long
Till before you know it
You're looking back at an island
Full of paradise
So far out of reach
And the magnificent bridge that once linked you there
Is in flames
Burning in black and white
And the fire seems so cold
It threatens to freeze your heart still
Attempting to sweep you into sorrow
And when you can't remember how it happened
You just look at your hands
(so filthy)
Muddy, red, and soaked in guilt
As the gas can at your feet laughs at you
A maddening guffaw plowing into your mind
And out through your face
Carrying tears of remorse
That you were trying to glue your sanity with
But that shatters
As your voice rives
Off the glass walls around you
Allowing you to perceive but not to exist
And through your blurried vision
You notice there's another island behind you
And another to the left
To the right
All around
Everywhere
Each filled with a life you once led
Where you knew happiness
And even a little love
But all the connections are dead
All the bridges reduced to ash
Stranding you here
Boxing you into a joyless mold
Where only depression and anger contend for your mindset
But you don't even notice
You just stare at the things you once held
So far away
So utterly lifeless to you
Subtly mocking your present state
And then, with a tired mortality
You slide out of your cube
Gazing into the past
Clutching the little warmth that's left
As your body is overtaken
By the cruel ocean currents
Copyright ©
sicknivesevered
... [
2005-05-06 10:39:44]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Drown Me Inside
(User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 12:43:15 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
"Carrying tears of remorse
That you were trying to glue your sanity with"
I really love that, and I don't know why. Just the thought of tears gluing sanity appeals to me. It's actually kinda true.. a person with go insane if they don't have a way to release frustration.
I like this, but it maybe goes on a little too much.
Great write though,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
|
|
Re: Drown Me Inside
(User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonOrgazm on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 03:27:31 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
i agree with phil. this is a very good and descriptive piece.. intoxicating.
Tiff |
|
|
Re: Drown Me Inside
(User Rating: 1 )
by xXcrossedXx on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 08:58:42 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very deep and powerful write, I like it! Nice job, keep it up. and thanks for commenting on my poem.
--amanda-- |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
