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Exposed
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 07:17:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You lit the spark, I fanned the fire
hold me love; my burning desire
You warmed me up when I was so cold
take me darling; I'm yours to hold
I thought my heart had been stripped clean
but this love's deeper than anything I could've foreseen
I'm but a shadow of my former self
I keep my emotions in a book upon the shelf
You came into my life unexpected
my life before you was kinda hectic
I love you more now than I did back then,
please help me to forget way back when...
You tasted my wealth; I let you in
now where does this fantasy end and where does it begin?
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hauntedscorp
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2005-05-05 19:17:56]
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Re: Exposed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 07:20:00 PM AEST
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| Fluffy it may be, but very *good* fluff! The eternal infernal questions which we all face at some time or another. unexpected and hectic - now that's a rhyme I wouldn't have thought of. Nice work! |
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Re: Exposed
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by Kyarn on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 08:08:58 PM AEST
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Thats...thats really good!
~Kyarn |
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Re: Exposed
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 08:24:15 PM AEST
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Very good question? I love the way you reasoned on it! And I find your poetry rather
refreshing also. Different style, different theme. Much imagination here too.
Thanking you so much also for your nice comment on Stitch's poem. We will really miss her.
Warm Love
and nice to meet you
ConSue |
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Re: Exposed
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 08:55:17 PM AEST
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oh wow, amazing, i can relate to almost every word
love does crazy things and sometimes causes us alot of sadness
"I'm but a shadow of my former self
I keep my emotions in a book upon the shelf" that line is great and again i feel this same way
great poem |
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Re: Exposed
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by Zeldianus on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 09:16:40 PM AEST
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| extraordinarily beautiful...if not sad. |
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Re: Exposed
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 12:12:59 AM AEST
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| very good poem i love it.. |
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Re: Exposed
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 08:57:01 AM AEST
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Hmmm questions...questions....don't forget to take the time to enjoy!
Refreshing style, it has a light flow on the surface with subtle but deep undertones. |
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Re: Exposed
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by seci on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 12:08:17 PM AEST
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| you are so good. you are a very deep writer/poet. i can't wait to actually read moreof your poems and take tips from them |
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Re: Exposed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:13:47 AM AEST
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| I like the "fluff" Scorp. :) Very very well done. Keep it up!!! |
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