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Happily never after
Contributed by
MaRy_JaNe_420
on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 05:13:51 PM in AEST
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Life isnt a fairy tale, yet nothing in it's real
I know how to cope with stuff, I Just not know how to deal
because evryone has lied to me and nothing left is real
There's been bruises, scabs and blood, but ther broken heart wont heal
You'll never know who anyone trully is, everyone hides the facts
They hide their hearts, and covered their faces with masks
No one knows the truth, You can never know how it feels
To discover you never knew what was fake and what was real
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MaRy_JaNe_420
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2005-05-05 17:13:51]
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Re: Happily never after
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by xxbreathlessx on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 05:23:32 PM AEST
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i think this poem gave a geat message and was written nicely, it seems that maybe your trying to rhyme too hard, but its still nicely written and i love how you contradict and display the message clearly at the end.
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Re: Happily never after
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 05:40:01 PM AEST
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| Really good write cause I can tell it was from the heart, but try to just let the words flow a bit more...Don't get so hung up on how it sounds. Straight from the gut is best, no matter how raw ; ) Scorp. |
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