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Veil of Tears
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 09:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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In the dead, dark night
Curtains drawn tight
My fear is awakened
Through my veil of tears
I see your pointing fingers
Your heads thrown back in laughter
At me...
Through the confusion
I can hear your laughter
Which slices through me
Like I'm made out of paper
Confused and angry
At why I am forbidden to live and love
Who makes these rules anyway?
Through my cloak of depression
I'm drawn to the razor
Central, in all my fields of vision
My hand shaking, breathing laboured
Whoever said giving in his weak?
Through my sadness
I can see that you don't care
That our 'friendship' was a fake
As was everything you said
I dont want your body, just your love
In the dead, dark night
Eyes closed with leaden fright
Trying to block out this nightmare
When can I have some hope?
When will I be pulled out
Of this quicksand called depression?
Or will it envelope me completely?
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2002-12-27 21:00:00]
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by OreO on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 09:18:39 PM AEST
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She must have some really low self esteem to treat herself that way, and not to trust in your love like that, i love the line " I can hear your laughter which slices through me like im made out of paper" that is beautifully written the way you layed that part out in the poem....Don't let it bind you down my friend where your hurting your own self over a person who has such low self esteem such as this you will surely get hurt worse than you are already....i think i liked this poem much better this time around of reading it...it's very deeply written bobo....thanks for sharing this one...i think this one is my favorite out of all the one's you have written....
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by ashleigh4 on
Sunday, 29th December 2002 @ 06:45:29 AM AEST
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i know what it's like to be suspicious of love. you always think that the person is wanting more of you, that theyre using you...
dont be hard on yourself over this girl, she hurt u to protect herself, and it is definitely her loss...
well written, i really could relate to this... |
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by Vampy on
Monday, 30th December 2002 @ 12:40:38 PM AEST
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| I love this one, Joel. I'm sorry that you've been hurt so bad... maybe you should show the girl this one. I believe your feelings for her are true and maybe someday she could get over thinking you just want her for her body... |
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by thorns on
Thursday, 2nd January 2003 @ 06:40:34 PM AEST
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| your pain is evident in this poem. i'm pretty sure no one likes being laughed at. |
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th November 2003 @ 07:41:54 PM AEST
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hey i thought your poem was really nice
you really have a talent going on there!!! |
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