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Tainted Peach
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 11:22:08 PM in AEST
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My knight in shining armour
come rescue me
I'm a troubled little girl; or can't you see?
Don't walk away if I turn my back
but don't turn yours,or I might attack
don't pay me no mind when I'm being spiteful
they're just empty words; I don't mean to be frightful
I really do need you, though I'm kind of messed up
So cut me some slack, but don't you dare let up!
My anger comes from long, long ago
so please don't give up if I ask you to go slow
I want to share with you my fears and dreams
but I don't want to open-up in case you demean
Inside my heart is a cold, cold girl
waiting to seek revenge on the whole wide world
She stripped the lost little angel of her wings
and sewd her mouth shut so she could not sing
a song of much loss and sorrow...
You're here today but will you be tomorrow?
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hauntedscorp
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 11:35:30 PM AEST
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Sad but very good writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:33:05 AM AEST
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Very honest writing.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:54:59 AM AEST
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This poem is very unique very you, i like the
the cat and mouse effect straight foward yet
pulls back very effective writting . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 02:19:57 AM AEST
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sad so sad and honest.
I really really like this piece.
well done |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 03:34:13 AM AEST
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Go away ... no wait a minute ... Yeah, after a while it does get harder and harder to stay ...I guess the best part of this is that you see and recognize a situation or symptom ... that means you can address it and try to change it. Woderfully "true" write.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by sride686 on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 02:52:51 AM AEST
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| Wow this is a really good write great choice of words and it really draws the reader in. You get lost in the indecisiveness of the write and its how life really is. Its so hard to let go of someone you love and it is a hard struggle I’ve been their done that. I like the last line (You're here today but will you be tomorrow) it’s a strong ending to this write that really leaves the readers thoughts in the write. My thoughts are with you my friend and thank you for sharing yet another profound work of art. Take care and keep in touch. I’ve had writers block so I got nothing new to post. Bye for now….Steve |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:01:28 AM AEST
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Incredibly powerful. Definitely deserves more than a 4.333 rating. Keep it up!!! :)
T |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by jyssvw22 on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 12:26:06 PM AEST
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wow, i read this before but as im going through your stuff...and i know you a little better now...im so moved
excellent write |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 01:29:12 PM AEST
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| very.. very moving write!!! your poems are really drawing me in... they are very much like a close friend of mine. I dated her and the relationship felt a lot like the words of this poem. Very good write and keep up the fine writing. dw |
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Re: Tainted Peach
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 21st November 2014 @ 03:25:04 PM AEST
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this is brilliant! ...seems their armour usually has to be
buffed up a bit at the very least, so few men give a hoot
about a girls feelings- 'women are sooo emotional!' they
whine, ~what happened to old school--> candies, flowers
and movies.....
hugs n' love nessa |
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