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Overdose
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 08:13:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Your life got shook with a needle prick
bet you didn't think you'd get something that'd stick
You plunged it in to ease the pain
the poison spread throughout your veins
Your troubles eased for a little while
but when they found you, you were vomiting bile
the damage was done and now the light beckons...
I hold you close, I hold you near
I look into your eyes and I all see is fear
Another soldier fallen; the henchmen have come
I whisper in your ear---you shouldn't have been the one....
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hauntedscorp
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2005-05-04 20:13:11]
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Re: Overdose
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by Sinned on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 08:47:35 PM AEST
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Hauntedscorp
WOW
You covered most all feelings in this poem. Anger,love,pain,frustration.
The only thing notcovered is happiness and that would have been impossible in this situtation. Great poem your emotions jumped out at me.
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Re: Overdose
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 03:26:52 AM AEST
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A tough subject to write about ... but I think the thing I admire most about it, is the fact that you pull no punches ... you don't beat around the bush ... you don't dress it up or try to glamorize it. I like that.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Overdose
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by heartless_soul on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 01:18:16 AM AEST
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| a truly well ment poem and I hope that the indivdual you were writing it for knows your feelings and I do hope thay your friendship will help them through it every one could use a friend like you (I know that its been said before but its true.) the emotioins covayed in this poem were abundent for its size, I am looking forword to reading more of your stuff. be well. |
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Re: Overdose
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 04:09:51 AM AEST
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| This was really gut wrenching to me. It brought tears to my eyes as I can relate to it very much. Very strong emotion and conveyed very well. Great piece of work. I don't know what else to say except that again I think it is a great poem and it still has me thinking about some very similar occurrences in my lifetime and I think I want to cry now. Sooo heartfelt. |
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Re: Overdose
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 21st November 2014 @ 03:27:46 PM AEST
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written to perfection- this just gives me memory chills.............................
hugs n' love nessa |
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