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Unfortunate weekness
Contributed by
sheigha
on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 08:30:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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My body is like a jar
Being pumped full of emotions
The positive ones are set free
But the negative ones cannot escape
They build up
The pressure is insurmountable and unbearable
I try to twist off the lid
But it's stuck
I can't ask anyone to help me
They might find out that although the label says I'm strong
The contents inside really point out weekness
So everyday I sit alone
Trying to pry open the jar
And everytime I am unsuccessful
Someday maybe I'll just smash it
Copyright ©
sheigha
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2002-12-27 08:30:00]
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Re: Unfortunate weekness
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by aernby on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 10:59:33 AM AEST
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this is a very good write with the central metaphore carried thru nicely ----
i hope before you do smash things up you'll get help from someone --- you'll find that you are not alone -----
good write --
seasons blessings
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Re: Unfortunate weekness
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by OreO on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 02:52:47 PM AEST
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Sometimes we need to smash it to find truth of what lies within it...then and only then can you find the true honest things your heart searches for...but smash them wisely ....some things that are smashed cannot be repaired....beautiful write here i enjoyed this one alot....thank you for sharing it...
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