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An Empty Shell
Contributed by
NightOwl
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Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 01:01:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Delicate fingers stroking my face
Loving hands picking me up when I fall
A warm, kind, wholesome embrace
Gentle answers when I call
You surround and encompass my dreams
Whenever I close my eyes
Envisioning you close, yet waking from my screams
As I realize, again, that your love is a lie
How could you have refused me?
My heart, my whole being, without reserve
You stole my love for your abusive hobby
You told me it was what I deserved
You defiled my being and stole my life
My soul, my innocence, my childhood, you molested
My life ended when you raped me with your body and knife
I became the empty shell that you desecrated.
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NightOwl
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Re: An Empty Shell
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by iodinelove on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 01:09:07 AM AEST
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Your word choice needs some work....but so does mine and so does everybodies.....grab a book on grammar or ignore it completly.....play around...there are more popular forms...actually I think the rhyming crap is a bunch of phooey (unless it's done well; think dante) but that's just me....I like to play with mixing older and newer....but in any case...just keep writing....i dunno how old you are or anything, but I started writing at 16 and never stopped and I fell that i'm pretty good....but a lot of the times i produce grabage that doesn't even deserve to be burned, much lee read....but everyone does.....it's like every thing in life....sometimes it's good, sometimes no...
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Re: An Empty Shell
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by emystar on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 01:35:05 AM AEST
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Very sad but well written.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: An Empty Shell
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 10:44:04 PM AEST
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| This is a very well-written yet extremely emotional and heartbreaking poem you have here. |
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Re: An Empty Shell
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by Archie on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 09:49:15 AM AEST
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| In the bible it says It would be better for a millstone to be tied around the nect of a person and have him drowned in the depths of the sea than for him to harm a child. My heart goes out to you. |
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