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Puddle
Contributed by
crazygirl
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Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 05:24:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I hate you, i love you;i still cant decide
It seems Every heartbeat without you brings more tears
Its begining to form a pond here,soon it will be a lake
A lake of sorrow i shall drown in if i dont swim away
Than the tears will stop
And ill be free of my emotional prison;The lake will become a puddle i can walk right through
I've decided i dont love or hate you; i love me
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2005-05-01 17:24:34]
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Re: Puddle
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 09:31:11 PM AEST
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This is nice, it's really positive at the end. I need to be more positive in my poems.
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Re: Puddle
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by emystar on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 03:15:50 AM AEST
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A very good write for the first one.
Welcome to the jungle. Jus write, write, write.
hugggs,
emy |
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Re: Puddle
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by Sinned on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 05:20:59 AM AEST
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Crazygirl--not
I hate you I love you--I first hand know the feeling.
Lots of emotional feelings here expressed in a short write.
For a first poem you did really well.
For one who has a lost love I can relate to this.
Like you Ive learned to love myself.
I hope to read more of your works.
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