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His Final Good Bye (fiction)
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KishaLovesCare126
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Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 02:59:26 AM in AEST
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His Final Good Bye
4/7/05
12:52:19 AM
Dear mom and dad
While I hang from the ceiling fan
Don't be angry or shed your tears
This was my fault I let the people
Who tortured me, I let them win.
Every day you would ask me how I was
The same reply would be "yea, I'm fine"
Deep inside under my skin beneath my bones
I wasn’t okay I was alone, afraid of my self
Couldn’t handle seeing everyone I loved how I let them down.
I wanted you both to help me
I was scared what would happen if I’d let you both in
Now its to late I took my own life I’ll swim in sins
To many times I asked for help from the mighty lord
And every time my prayers never answered I bled on my floor.
I love you both very much
Don’t think of this as your fault’s
I was coward to save my own life to believe in god
Each day you’ll understand a little bit more about my hidden life
You’ll both move on survive this terrible pain
This is my final good bye. Love Always, Your Son.
Copyright ©
KishaLovesCare126
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Re: His Final Good Bye (fiction)
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 05:15:15 AM AEST
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| this is a very sad poem! but good. |
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Re: His Final Good Bye (fiction)
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 10:42:22 AM AEST
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That is a true sad write. The flow was a bit choppy however the connection of thoughts convayed well chosen. I believe the final line pretty much says it all. Good write.
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Re: His Final Good Bye (fiction)
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 05:18:31 PM AEST
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wow Care this was really hard to read. I
know it was fiction but this described me so
well. The second stanza in particular as well as:
"To many times I asked for help from the mighty lord
And every time my prayers never answered I bled on my floor. "
Wow yeah I can relate to this so much. I love
this, but it brings back a lot of painful
memories... thanks for sharing this though.
Bobo (Joel)
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Re: His Final Good Bye (fiction)
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by waos on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 05:25:27 PM AEST
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I agree with Joel. One thing that made me think was the bleeding on the floor
part when God didn't answer. That makes me feel regret over the past. I never
used to listen for God, never used to ask for help and want it at the same time.
Good job writing this, it really made me think and remember.
~Waos/Kara |
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