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I've Hit The Bottom

Contributed by sprinter27 on Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 09:15:04 PM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

I’ve hit the bottom
There is nothing I can do
I’ve hit the bottom

People say,
Once you’ve hit the bottom,
The only way to go is up
You know what I say to that?
What goes up,
Has got to fall
What goes up,
Has got to fall

So I’ve hit the bottom
I don’t feel like getting up
Because what goes up,
Has got to fall
I’ve hit the bottom
I won’t bother trying to get up
I don’t want to try to go the only way I can
I don’t want to try to go up
Because what goes up,
Has got to fall
What goes up,
Has got to fall

I’ve hit the bottom
There is nothing I can do
To help myself
Cause if I try to go the only way I can,
If I try to go up,
I will just fall back down
Because what goes up,
Has got to fall

I’ve hit the bottom
And I can’t go the only way to go,
I can’t go up
Because what goes up,
Has got to fall
I’ve hit the bottom
What goes up,
Has got to fall
I’ve hit the bottom, I have hit the bottom, I’ve hit the bottom

Copyright Â© sprinter27 ... [ 2005-04-29 21:15:04]
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Re: I've Hit The Bottom (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 09:28:16 PM AEST
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i am one that cant stand repetition (as all of the site knows, lol) and this poem was full of it. i believe that using the same words and concept in a poem to excess takes the power and emotion away. for instance youve used the word bottom over ten times. the "has to fall" statement was used just as much. with so much repetition it, the power is gone. your concept that what goes up has to fall to contradict the common statement of rock bottom was very well conceptwise, but making your piece rely so much on the statement being repeated just took out substance and made this dauntingly redundant. for instance saying the same line twice in a 3 line stanza was too much. your ending, of using it three times made me think the same. my belief that once you hit rock bottom you no longer can fall...so why bother going up?

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