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Bitter Sweet Kiss
Contributed by
essentially9
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Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 08:39:37 PM in AEST
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Bitter Sweet Kiss
I can still taste your bitterness
As it replaces my loneliness.
If only it wouldn't have come to this
After so much bliss.
If only never happens and never did
Like your forgotten sin.
Our love was like the rose full of thorns,
And yet my pricked finger still mourns
Your absence in my life,
Because now I sleep alone at night.
I can still taste your bitterness
Even with your absence
I still wish for that one kiss
That makes if only more than this.
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 08:47:25 PM AEST
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I love this Jen...as normal, Very well done..and the ending is very well done, as is the rest but the end was my fav. part....as always....;-]
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by TheVoice on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 09:14:15 PM AEST
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another beautiful write jennifer.
The Voice
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 11:03:48 PM AEST
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what a portrayl of loneliness, your writting is
captivating, what a cold and determined cry
4 love tha was, beautiful poetry, u r a gift 2
the art itself in which u partake . . .
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 01:25:06 AM AEST
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another well done write .
always have the great ryme and ending... |
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 04:10:57 PM AEST
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| A so beautiful poem - i can so relate and i wish for one last kiss from so many...excellent write! |
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by Ravensfire on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 04:57:13 PM AEST
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| Your words, your poetry as usual outstanding ! |
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 06:27:03 PM AEST
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Quite a romantic write of a love gone bad. I think this poem points out that you can still grieve the loss of a relationship, even if it didn't go well between the couple involved.
Very well done, the theme reminds me somewhat of my poem "Mourning the Dream"
Well done
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 04:26:43 PM AEST
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| I can't believe I didn't post a comment on this! It's been up since Monday, where the heck was I!? Lol, but anyways, this was a poem that I could easily see myself writing one day, not that I like to plagarise, but hopefully u get what i mean :P It's just relatable. I loved the second-to-last stanza a whole lot, because you've revealed like a part of a routine that has now changed with the person's absence. I loved the conclusion too! I guess that's the most relatable statement in the entire thing. I'm sort of a sucker for punishment too, maybe there's some subconscious mumbo jumbo going on up there in my head, but it sums up the reasons for the poem, the reasons why it has the potential to continue, and just why exactly the emotions are what they are in the written piece. Beautiful work here : ) tasty even... |
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 01:35:17 AM AEST
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a poem that breathes... hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Bitter Sweet Kiss
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 03:25:39 AM AEST
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I actually love those first two lines best, but the whole write was easily relatable for me, at the moment.
So, needless to say, I enjoyed this emotional read : )
Scorp.
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