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Wipe My Tears Away
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 08:23:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Wipe My Tears Away
The world darkens into nothingness
With the end of my willingness
To live replaced by anger
And hateful rancor.
Everything that I used to live for
Is no longer there anymore,
So therefor I am no one
Important to anyone.
So heartless I've been in life
To numb all of my strife,
And still the pain
Doesn't fade.
So I'll wipe the tears away
For blood to replace.
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essentially9
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2005-04-24 20:23:20] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 08:33:31 PM AEST (User
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Very powerful and I like the way you made the lines dwindle torwards the bottom...the rhyme is great and it is as smooth with its rhythmn as a babies bottom, Jen...Very nice work as usual.
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 09:24:57 PM AEST (User
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What a strong replacement for tears. It gave me a lot of strange thoughts, lol that hasnt been done to me in a while. After reading it and 20/20 hindsight, it seems like the natural ending, but the first time reading that conclusion was just excellent, it was totally unexpected. Lol, and it looked like a downwards pointing arrow, just in terms of how the poem itself was layed out. I know for a fact too that this is a fictional piece, because I'm definite you're someone important to somebody, or rather, some people. Remember that movie "It's a Wonderful Life?" 'Nuff Said :P Great write, as usual |
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 10:58:21 PM AEST (User
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wow like wow.
amazingly written .... |
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by mina-1 on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 07:51:01 PM AEST (User
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Jen this piece is divine. I feel that there is more to this poem. A hidden message between the lines. Your style is unique and you express yourself so well. You elucidate this poem showing the emotions of one who is hurting. Awesome as always dearest Jen.
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by TheVoice on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 09:38:27 PM AEST (User
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This brings vivid pictures to mind. Powerful write.
Hope you are well Jennifer.
The Voice
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Re: Wipe My Tears Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 12:44:20 PM AEST (User
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This reminds me of very traditional poetry (a compliment by the way...). Everything yet nothing all at once...I like the way you wrote this. No denying the emotion, yet the reader isn't drowning in it. Good job.
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