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Tomarrow
Contributed by
breny
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 05:53:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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no, not again
not now and here
its been 6 days
since I shed my last tear
When will it end?
Will the pain ever stop?
it's been 3 weeks
yet they continue to drop
tomarrows the day
will i survive?
will my world crumble?
will my heart die?
I'm not even here
I'm not able to think
everytime I do
I continue to sink
how low can I go
till I cant anymore?
living my life
has become a chore
Why did you do it?
do you even know?
you used to love me
where did it go?
Copyright ©
breny
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2005-04-24 17:53:18]
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Re: Tomarrow
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:33:05 PM AEST
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A touching piece, you really conveyed your emotions here beautifully and it was a sort of a sad write, because I know you've been struggling with this and you've been doing amazing so far getting through all these emotions. You've come this far, and you're almost in the clear. Best of luck to you and hope you pull through this like you've always been doing. And the write was good too :P
lol seriously though, it really was a great poem I love the kind of ideas you come up with and the unique way you always seem to find a rhyme scheme to fit it all in. Great stuff Brenna! |
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Re: Tomarrow
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 01:17:21 AM AEST
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oh breny this hit me hard such a voice of
poetic weeping loves cruelty and yet there
is hope my friend but not right now soon
though it will all come 2 gether and the
hurting will stop . . . (((((breny)))))
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Re: Tomarrow
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 10:07:12 PM AEST
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Awesome stuff brenna!
This piece was touching, very clear and well expressed..
You've managed to portray your emotions so so well...
I can only wish you the best of luck, I know you can pull through this, and if you ever need a shoulder to lean on, you know where I be :)
Expressive write ;)
love, hope n faith,
~kt |
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Re: Tomarrow
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:42:51 AM AEST
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Very emotional,
a great job of the feeling of anticipation, nastolgia and a bit of...dread?
well done! |
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Re: Tomarrow
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 03:27:56 PM AEST
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| This is a very sad and touching piece and I thank you for sharing yourt heart with us through this powerful piece of art. take care and keep your head up....Steve |
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