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What is Life
Contributed by
sride686
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:11:53 PM in AEST
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Life is dark and life gets old
For over are life we have no control
We are just pieces moving around
Waiting for the day to inter the ground
For life is death and death is sweat
For death is the end of all life’s grief
Why are we here if only to die
What does God want from are pathetic lives
Cut your wrist and feel the pain
Watch all the life flow from your vein
For this is life in all its fame
A game of hate and lust and shame
You cut yourself to feel alive
And feel the pain flow from your eyes
Now you know there is know change
Your still stuck in this ***** up game
Were all you have is hate and pain
For all your love has gone insane
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sride686
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Re: What is Life
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by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:18:19 PM AEST
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a very well written dark write, I am not religious but I can fully understand when people doubt in life if God does care of even exist when things keep happening. good write
pix xx |
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Re: What is Life
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:29:45 PM AEST
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| thank you for your comment on another of my writes. it is hard to believe in a God who seems to never be their. But as you can see He's not doing much for my life.....Steve |
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Re: What is Life
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by smiley_jennyxoxo on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:52:47 PM AEST
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| That's a great poem. I feel like that almost every day, when I'm home alone and I feel pain. I've cut myself, but I still wouldn't consider suicide. Life for me lately has been full of pain and deceit though. I hate it, yet I try and find ways to deal. I hope you can find other ways to deal with the pain than cutting. Jenny |
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Re: What is Life
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by mina-1 on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 09:35:03 PM AEST
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Immensely dark, but alot of hidden truths behind the lines. I know where u r coming from Steve. Have faith my dear friend for God is with the patient ones. I've endured alot in my life and when u read my work you'll know all the pain and torment that I went through( my earlier pieces ) I still believed. You should too my friend.
It's good you're getting those negative thoughts outta of ur head and onto paper. It helps to vent out all the negativity in our lives.
Keep up with the amazing work.
Remember that u have people who really care for u and I'm one of them. Take care and my prayers are with u Steve.
Hugs,
~sue~ |
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Re: What is Life
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by undeniable2003 on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 01:13:29 PM AEST
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| eerie, but puts life into another perspective.....very well written. Very Good |
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Re: What is Life
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by In_a_while on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 10:51:05 AM AEST
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| That was really good. It's amazing to see all those strong feelings and vivid imagery contained in such a strong rhyming structure. i'm glad i read it, and keep up the good work. |
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